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Raymond commented on the post, Share a Death 4 years, 9 months ago
…This I like.
Lay off the adjectives though.
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Raymond commented on the post, Memo To All – Naijastories How Far??!! 5 years ago
@jefsaraurmax, @kaycee is doing very well, I can tell you. I am fine. Hope you are too.
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Raymond commented on the post, Memo To All – Naijastories How Far??!! 5 years ago
@Ugochukwu, nice write up. @jefsaraurmax is right (hello jefsaraurmax, longest time). Back then, we had wonderful variety of writers and stories. Funny enough, I wasn’t the first horror or thriller writer on this […]
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Raymond commented on the post, Uko Bendi Udo – Yeye Dey Smell 5 years, 11 months ago
@howyoudey, done. Here: http://www.naijastories.com/2014/03/kill-zone-sector-36-c-1/
Read and share.
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Raymond commented on the post, Uko Bendi Udo – Yeye Dey Smell 5 years, 11 months ago
…Vintage you. Excellent flow as usual; you write as though you’ve got the story by the scruff of the neck.
Love it.
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Raymond commented on the post, Kill Zone: Sector 36-C (1) 5 years, 11 months ago
@Seun-Odukoya, yes Boss
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Raymond commented on the post, Birthright – Chapter One 5 years, 11 months ago
Okay, I am hooked, and it takes a lot to make me hooked. Something to look forward to… Well done.
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Raymond commented on the post, I See Things Other Do Not See (10) 5 years, 11 months ago
…I understand what you tried to pull off now, but don’t let your story cut your readers off by making them go back to figure out what is going on. Title as well…
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Raymond commented on the post, Dark Corners 5 years, 11 months ago
…Like a punch…
Good job. Work on the consistency of your tenses though. While recollecting, you used Past Tense instead of the Past Participle that you’d started with.
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Raymond commented on the post, Kill Zone: Sector 36-C (1) 5 years, 11 months ago
Thank you. On it…
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Raymond commented on the post, Kill Zone: Sector 36-C (1) 5 years, 11 months ago
@ayobare, err… cos he wore a special suit with such capabilities? Thank you
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Raymond wrote a new post, Kill Zone: Sector 36-C (1) 5 years, 11 months ago
I stepped off the Nebula SS onto the ground, the dry dirt crunching beneath my boots. My visor became stuffy immediately. Adjusting my rifle, I flicked open the control pad on my left arm, tweaked the controls. […]
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Raymond commented on the post, The Last Curse (Chapter 2) 5 years, 11 months ago
Okay, where is Chapter 1? Want to read now.
Good take on the zombie niche. I usually shy away from it cos it has been rehashed way too any times, but hey, rock on.
Watch your words though. When writing […]
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Raymond commented on the post, I See Things Others Do Not See(7) 5 years, 11 months ago
Too abrupt, the way he let his secret slip. Have my own ideas, but it is your story, so…
Not bad. Fix all fixables for the next one. Remember, pacing… Good luck. -
Raymond commented on the post, I See Things Others Do Not See(6) 5 years, 11 months ago
Not bad.
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Raymond commented on the post, I See Things Others Do Not See(5) 5 years, 11 months ago
Not bad.
Knew the teritory this was going from the 2nd chapter.
So who is he, Nigeria’s own Odd Thomas?
You really need to stop rushing your writing…
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Raymond commented on the post, I see things others do not see (4) 5 years, 11 months ago
……Meh.
Atmosphere matters.
This was a short scene, but that’s not the point. There are critical points in every story or scene, and this was one of them. This was rushed. The moment between your MC and the […] -
Raymond commented on the post, I see things others do not see (3) 5 years, 11 months ago
…For me the opening was not so strong, and the end was even worse (no offense). Personally, when writing series like this, I try to end it with something that will stick in the mind of the reader, creating a […]
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Raymond commented on the post, A Series: I see things others do not see (2) 5 years, 11 months ago
Easy read. Not bad, but this became predictable once the girl stepped into the picture…
Still…off to the next. - Load More