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Raymond commented on the post, Uko Bendi Udo – Yeye Dey Smell 10 months, 2 weeks ago
@howyoudey, done. Here: http://www.naijastories.com/2014/03/kill-zone-sector-36-c-1/
Read and share.
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Raymond commented on the post, Uko Bendi Udo – Yeye Dey Smell 10 months, 2 weeks ago
…Vintage you. Excellent flow as usual; you write as though you’ve got the story by the scruff of the neck.
Love it.
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Raymond commented on the post, Kill Zone: Sector 36-C (1) 10 months, 3 weeks ago
@Seun-Odukoya, yes Boss
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Raymond commented on the post, Birthright – Chapter One 10 months, 3 weeks ago
Okay, I am hooked, and it takes a lot to make me hooked. Something to look forward to… Well done.
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Raymond commented on the post, I See Things Other Do Not See (10) 10 months, 3 weeks ago
…I understand what you tried to pull off now, but don’t let your story cut your readers off by making them go back to figure out what is going on. Title as well…
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Raymond commented on the post, Dark Corners 10 months, 3 weeks ago
…Like a punch…
Good job. Work on the consistency of your tenses though. While recollecting, you used Past Tense instead of the Past Participle that you’d started with.
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Raymond commented on the post, Kill Zone: Sector 36-C (1) 10 months, 3 weeks ago
Thank you. On it…
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Raymond commented on the post, Kill Zone: Sector 36-C (1) 10 months, 3 weeks ago
@ayobare, err… cos he wore a special suit with such capabilities? Thank you
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Raymond wrote a new post, Kill Zone: Sector 36-C (1) 10 months, 3 weeks ago
I stepped off the Nebula SS onto the ground, the dry dirt crunching beneath my boots. My visor became stuffy immediately. Adjusting my rifle, I flicked open the control pad on my left arm, tweaked the controls. […]
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Raymond commented on the post, The Last Curse (Chapter 2) 10 months, 3 weeks ago
Okay, where is Chapter 1? Want to read now.
Good take on the zombie niche. I usually shy away from it cos it has been rehashed way too any times, but hey, rock on.
Watch your words though. When writing […]
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Raymond commented on the post, I See Things Others Do Not See(7) 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Too abrupt, the way he let his secret slip. Have my own ideas, but it is your story, so…
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Raymond commented on the post, I See Things Others Do Not See(6) 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Not bad.
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Raymond commented on the post, I See Things Others Do Not See(5) 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Not bad.
Knew the teritory this was going from the 2nd chapter.
So who is he, Nigeria’s own Odd Thomas?
You really need to stop rushing your writing…
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Raymond commented on the post, I see things others do not see (4) 10 months, 4 weeks ago
……Meh.
Atmosphere matters.
This was a short scene, but that’s not the point. There are critical points in every story or scene, and this was one of them. This was rushed. The moment between your MC and the […] -
Raymond commented on the post, I see things others do not see (3) 10 months, 4 weeks ago
…For me the opening was not so strong, and the end was even worse (no offense). Personally, when writing series like this, I try to end it with something that will stick in the mind of the reader, creating a […]
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Raymond commented on the post, A Series: I see things others do not see (2) 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Easy read. Not bad, but this became predictable once the girl stepped into the picture…
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Raymond commented on the post, A series: I see things others do not see (1) 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Not a bad start… Like the fact that you are trying not to make this a serious journal-like story…
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Raymond commented on the post, Eater 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Hehehe… Thanks…
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Raymond commented on the post, Follow Your Dreams 11 months ago
Hmm…
Has a rushed feel to it. Feels a bit lacking in depth, altough it has a powerful message. You should study Psychology as a Masters Degree. I know you, you can do it…
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Raymond commented on the post, My creepiest experience 1 year, 4 months ago
Hehehe. @Hymar, why should I?
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