…I understand what you tried to pull off now, but don’t let your story cut your readers off by making them go back to figure out what is going on. Title as well…
And why write his name like that? Mr A**** ?
I stepped off the Nebula SS onto the ground, the dry dirt crunching beneath my boots. My visor became stuffy immediately. Adjusting my rifle, I flicked open the control pad on my left arm, tweaked the controls. […]
This was a short scene, but that’s not the point. There are critical points in every story or scene, and this was one of them. This was rushed. The moment between your MC and the […]
…For me the opening was not so strong, and the end was even worse (no offense). Personally, when writing series like this, I try to end it with something that will stick in the mind of the reader, creating a […]