@howyoudey, done. Here: http://www.naijastories.com/2014/03/kill-zone-sector-36-c-1/

Read and share.

…Vintage you. Excellent flow as usual; you write as though you’ve got the story by the scruff of the neck.

Love it.

@Seun-Odukoya, yes Boss

Okay, I am hooked, and it takes a lot to make me hooked. Something to look forward to… Well done.

…I understand what you tried to pull off now, but don’t let your story cut your readers off by making them go back to figure out what is going on. Title as well…
And why write his name like that? Mr A**** ?

…Like a punch…
Good job. Work on the consistency of your tenses though. While recollecting, you used Past Tense instead of the Past Participle that you’d started with.
Good work though.

Thank you. On it…

@ayobare, err… cos he wore a special suit with such capabilities? Thank you

Okay, where is Chapter 1? Want to read now.

Good take on the zombie niche. I usually shy away from it cos it has been rehashed way too any times, but hey, rock on.

Watch your words though. When writing […]

Too abrupt, the way he let his secret slip. Have my own ideas, but it is your story, so…
Not bad. Fix all fixables for the next one. Remember, pacing… Good luck.

Not bad.

Not bad.
Knew the teritory this was going from the 2nd chapter.
So who is he, Nigeria’s own Odd Thomas?
You really need to stop rushing your writing…
Pacing is key in writing…

……Meh.
Atmosphere matters.
This was a short scene, but that’s not the point. There are critical points in every story or scene, and this was one of them. This was rushed. The moment between your MC and the […]

…For me the opening was not so strong, and the end was even worse (no offense). Personally, when writing series like this, I try to end it with something that will stick in the mind of the reader, creating a […]

Easy read. Not bad, but this became predictable once the girl stepped into the picture…
Still…off to the next.

Not a bad start… Like the fact that you are trying not to make this a serious journal-like story…

Hehehe… Thanks…

Hmm…
Has a rushed feel to it. Feels a bit lacking in depth, altough it has a powerful message. You should study Psychology as a Masters Degree. I know you, you can do it…
P.S. Longest time…

Hehehe. @Hymar, why should I?
Nice piece by the way.