Good moral story, @idiong_divine, and quite well-written, too.

But it was a bit flat. No conflict, tension, nothing to make this particularly memorable. Maybe it would have been better if we had seen the father […]

The usual editing issues, @kodeya.

The suspense seems be fading, now that the MC is out of danger.

The transition to the hospital scene wasn’t well done. Sure, I figured out that he was in hospital, but how […]

Very suspenseful ending, @sharonwrites. Definitely makes me want to see what happens next.

I’m not sure about the paragraph that you have beginning “But as we know, Fate is a master meddler…” It’s like you – […]

Another well-written piece, @sharonwrites. The sleep-on-the-train sequence was a bit confusing for me, though – I had to re-read to understand what had happened. Maybe it’s because you inserted the bit about […]

As good as the previous installment. Very fluid and engaging. A few punctuation typos.

Well done, @lordkel.

Good installment, @lordkel. Well written, with very few typos, like

“beards” > “beard”.

I like how you showed the picture of Hanson who was not Hanson. You created a sense of suspense and unease; I want to […]

@immanueljames, this was beautiful writing. I loved the way you took what is a fairly common occurrence in Lagos and turned into an engaging, insightful and enjoyable description of the psyche of a working man. […]

@tosyno, I liked this.

Especially with lines like:

“I might be too dull for your liking,
Bet you, I’m too bright for my hating”

I would have rewritten

“I only wish you’ll give a penny…
Rather, a […]

Interesting read, @idiong_divine. I suspect that Oreva’s father found a lot of money, but let’s see if I’m right.

Your writing is generally good, although it has typos here and there. It also feels somehow […]

@sharonwrites, this was a solid, well-written installment which moves the story along so that I want to know what will happen next.

No, I have no suggestions for improvements or comments or questions. This was […]

The suspense continues. Well done on that front.

The story still has the many editing issues that we’ve seen in previous installments. Please pay attention to how you use ‘will’ and ‘would’.

It’s strange […]

Your point about how bad things are in the country comes through clearly, @samueldpoetry.

But the poem doesn’t feel very cohesive; it’s as though you just put down random thoughts that ocurred to you on the […]

This was a good read, @Ajenifuja-Adetokunbo. Not too over descriptive like the story I read a while ago. I like how you are building the web of who likes who amongst Jide, Solomon, Yetunde and Temi. Reminds of of <a href="http://www.naijastories.com/2012/03/the-quandarilateral-1/&quot; […]

@thelma0385,

I would have thought Biola would be more disappointed with the episode that emotionally hurt to the point of crying (unless sex is a big deal for her, but you don’t mention this in the […]

@idiong_divine,

Good start to the story. I like how you’ve painted a good picture of who Oreva is.

There are a few typos in the story, though, like

“mosquitoes-infested” > “mosquito-infested”

“Oreva […]

I didn’t get this at all, @stradol.

I get the sense of this – probably something to do with black oppression – but it never really comes together in crystal clarity for me, @edwina-neofloetry.

Interesting story, @wiki123. I liked the action sequences, especially where Sade forced the truth from Gbori.

I wouldn’t have made the flashback passages so long; it felt as though I was reading multiple […]

I’m not quite clear why Alhaji does not just think that Richard is unsuitable for Desola, but actively dislikes him, @olajumoke. Is it because he was married before? Somehow, I’m not convinced that this is enough […]

Very funny work, @ogbolesamson, and very true about many scenarios in Nigeria.

I wish you had gone easy on the rhyme-by-force aspect, though.

Well done.