mum was kinda harsh on him

@TolaO…

Undoubtedly.

this was fun to read and witty too..but i dont get the end..did they figure it our?

I suppose that it’s because it works, @seun-odukoya. It certainly brought me here.

A very sad story, @nicolebassey. Well written, but sad, still.

I kind of felt that the depth of sadness of the MC’s situation was kind of muted, though. Maybe it’s because she spoke in general rather than […]

@wordsfromuyi,

I liked this portrayal of a man who feels he is a failure. I especially liked this line, which captured the depth of his situation:

“The cat ran without any sign of fright, it was as if the […]

@chemokopi,

What I liked about this story was the natural way you introduced all the children of the family one by one to the reader. This is usually a very hard thing to pull off, especially in a short story. […]

When fiction became non-fictiion…this sure is it! Vivid? Yes! Love this line ‘…stuffing the air with the loud cries…’

Nice and packed…

Truly sad @Olaedo. I say this in reflection of what happened in this country last year. Glad you found it vivid: that was the intention.

bubbylina @sibbylwhite na u go use ur month talk o.

Yes, you are @cynthiaukamu

@olajumoke: Thanks so much for reading and commenting. Your praise is making me levitate. Lol

I am so glad you could relate with the story on the exact level I wanted for readers. Thanks again.

@dkny111, I like the way you experiment with the short story form we are used to. It works really well.
Welldone

Hmmmmm… @dkny111, thanks so much for your comment. Oga abi…? Hehehe…all of us dey learn jare

I am really glad you were able to connect with this story on a personal level. I should also use this avenue […]

@chemokopi My OGA, shey when I call you My Oga, you will say you are not.

Dude I don’t even know where to start, Like WOW seriously where did this come from.

I was reading the story and thinking where is he […]

@ayomitans I was wondering where you were, was going to call the police o to find you Thanks for reading man and the comments

@sibbylwhyte thanks for reading and the comment, yes it is hard especially since it’s a short story, but i’ll take all the comments and try and improve. Thanks

@yinkus101 Yes o God is great, far more greater than we think. Thanks for reading and the comment

@chemokopi, you took me with you from the first line. Captivating opening.

You write well. It was as if the tragedy was unfolding right in front of me. The tragic ending was unexpected and traumatic but yet,you […]

As a new person to this site, am i allowed to enter for the competition, without points and all?

@Estee, wow! You are far too kind!

I am happy you connected with the story on such a level. Thanks very much. I remain humble.

I’ve never read anything this touching.
The story was aptly illustrated and vivid.
I salute your writing prowess.

@Yeniee, I am so glad the horror of floods came alive to you through this story. That was the intention. Thanks very much for reading and commenting.

Thanks very much @Seun-Odukoya. I see your points and I have noted them. Thanks again.

Thanks very much for your kind words @queennobo. The names are of the Jenjo people of Karim-Lamido LGA of Taraba State. It was one of the places affected by the 2012 floods, so I decided to use names from there. […]

Awwww…thanks very much @sibbylwhyte. I am glad you found this work so. I really wanted to capture the horror some families must have experienced during the floods. I read of one Abdulhamid Useni who lost seven […]