Wow……..

this is a really brilliant piece. You make a touching story out of what would be an ordinary everyday occurence.

Well done!!!

Good work.Could use a bit more sensuality with the imagery though.

Well done!!!

@ jonnysnow: Thanks for dropping by and reading. This is all of the story as it is a flash fiction piece.

Cheers!!!

what I like about this is how you made a seemingly simple event of the everyday Lagos life into a story.Lotta kudos to you for that.Enough has been said on the grey areas.

Well done!!!

Not bad.

Well done!!!

Nice one. Now we’ve gotten to see a bit of the personality behind Da Writing Engineer!

And I even got a mention…..’blushing’. Just keep writing bro. It will sure be rewarding one day.

Cheers!!!

A very good one @ hesey. It is a woman thing,that’ss what I think and there is no wishing it away. It will jusst be good not to be vain about such things.

Well done!!!

@ Banky: You can flatter somebody sha.It won’t be much of a wonder if you have shorties falling all over your feet with this skill.

@ Afronuts: Was there any point in the story that the writer suggested the MC was not feeling any pain?That he decided to take it with a whimper does not wish the pain away.And I believe that point you were […]

This is good. It kind of reads like an episode out of a series? Wld try to look around for more of your works.

Well done!!!

@ banky: What more can I say?If there’s anything like a perfect story,I think this is it. There are just two areas I have issue with,would get to you when I’m around aa laptopm

Well done!!!

what I have come to realise it that…………just write! You will find your voice and a stlye that is uniquely yours.

This is a very incisive piece.

well done!!!

Lovely ending Writefight.

well done!!!

Now this is a trulyu heartfelt story.It deserves the spotlight and of course the win.

Don’t stop writing.

Well done!!!

I am just so sad.To think that I was in Lagos and I absolutely had no idead abot this.

So sad.So so sad……..*shaking head*