A good contrast of both worlds. Though I feel you should have done more with it.I feel it was too subtle. That’s ma view. All the same well done.

Its all good.

Kool.

It lacked emotion and energy. This could have been better.

Its all good.

The introduction was not it for me and it was too direct.

Just my opinion.

Keep on writing.

My opinion bout this piece is that it came out more like an article and less of a story.

The beginning was not it for me and it was also too direct.

I know that you were trying to point out an anomaly but I […]

A good poem. Creativity on point but I am a kinda lost. Tried to decipher the message but I couldnt.

Nice one though

Kool. Straight forward.

(@Shovey): (@SamodBiobaku):
You guys sure right bout that. Just wanted to stall abit. I don’t want to rush it.

Thank for reading.

(@praize): I get yiur drift bro. I comprehend the use of personification bro but the usage is important. We shouldnt say cos its writing then, we should use words or expressions without contexts. That said I wnt […]

Hmmmm……I won’t say much apart from the fact that you should do proper editing before posting.

I stopped reading cos the errors were just too much and I dnt want to start correcting it.

Editing can be a […]

(@anakadrian): I get the concept that some expressions can be ambiguous in nature but we have seen few post where an expression was not placed properly and the meaning was misconstrued.

Immediately I read that […]

(@anakadrian): I get the concept that some expressions can be ambigous in nature but we have seen few post where an expression was not place properly and the meaning was misconstrued.

Immediately I read that […]

(@anakadrian): Funny you. Thanks bro.

Bra if you say that I got alot of things wrong then you have to look at your piece again and tgen you’ll comprehend the true meaning of ‘wrong’.

How can something be properly written and yet there are loop […]

@litera-wise: From your user name it means you are a bloke who is knowledeable as regards literature.

But bro if you say it was perdectly written then I think that by now you should have published your first […]

(@Dante): I am not saying that u did. Your poem said so.

It is the Holy spirut and Jesus that sits on either side of God.

I still stand on the same thing as regards the last verse.

Making a race and […]

Hmmmm……. A good plot but alot of details did not add up. And the lack of puntuations made reading it abit incomprehensive. And your use of tenses and figurative expressions was a bit of.

1) “she had her […]