Kool. Straight forward.

(@Shovey): (@SamodBiobaku):
You guys sure right bout that. Just wanted to stall abit. I don’t want to rush it.

Thank for reading.

(@praize): I get yiur drift bro. I comprehend the use of personification bro but the usage is important. We shouldnt say cos its writing then, we should use words or expressions without contexts. That said I wnt […]

Hmmmm……I won’t say much apart from the fact that you should do proper editing before posting.

I stopped reading cos the errors were just too much and I dnt want to start correcting it.

Editing can be a […]

(@anakadrian): I get the concept that some expressions can be ambiguous in nature but we have seen few post where an expression was not placed properly and the meaning was misconstrued.

Immediately I read that […]

(@anakadrian): I get the concept that some expressions can be ambigous in nature but we have seen few post where an expression was not place properly and the meaning was misconstrued.

Immediately I read that […]

(@anakadrian): Funny you. Thanks bro.

Bra if you say that I got alot of things wrong then you have to look at your piece again and tgen you’ll comprehend the true meaning of ‘wrong’.

How can something be properly written and yet there are loop […]

@litera-wise: From your user name it means you are a bloke who is knowledeable as regards literature.

But bro if you say it was perdectly written then I think that by now you should have published your first […]

(@Dante): I am not saying that u did. Your poem said so.

It is the Holy spirut and Jesus that sits on either side of God.

I still stand on the same thing as regards the last verse.

Making a race and […]

Hmmmm……. A good plot but alot of details did not add up. And the lack of puntuations made reading it abit incomprehensive. And your use of tenses and figurative expressions was a bit of.

1) “she had her […]

Verse 5 line one. I dnt believe it is biblically correct cos Mary is not part of the Holy Trinity.

And in Line one of verse 2 ‘Lord’ was written as a common noun. It should have been in capital letter […]

A good poem. Got the message it sent Though one or two verses were confusing and incomprehensive;

Verse six; That night,you laid and slept in peace
But someone almost pneumonia
at 0 degree of point of […]

(@laworemike): There is no problem sir. We are all here to improve one another. No one knows it all.

Keep on writing.

I read the first part when you posted this piece and there were alot of errors in it that I thought you could have worked on as you were writing the next installment to ‘Arike’s Diary’, but really (I am sorry if I […]

(@MAXIMA): Good decision .

Hmmmmm….I am more lost. Are you talkibg bout dialogue? Cos this is a short story not poetry.

Like I said give me an lucid explanation. I will grately appreciate it.

Hmmmmm…What can I say. Kool write up. This was meant to be a poem but it turned out to be a real letter, because it lacked the elements of poetry.

Apart from the fact that it was arranged in verses it wasn’t […]

(@MAXIMA): Thanks for ur comment.

Rushy, I agree.

Less use of words; now am lost. Pls explain.

(@WAILINGINK) quite sad you beat me to it. I have a poem with this same title though my content is way more different frm yours.

Kool Love the angle tht you came from.