This is good. With some editing, it’d be brilliant. Nice job.

*sighs. You cant please everyone abi? Issokay. For me, this needs a re-write, nothing less will do.

Good one, the narrative was messed up with the inconsistent voice. It can be better, hotter.

Just seeing this. I guess i’m too late?

Nice one @jaywriter. @kaycee, no comment. I wonder when Lagos people go organise another meet sef. @seun-odukoya @shaifamily

The book delivers on a lot of levels, really.

I had the privilege of observing first hand the entire printing/publishing process and kudos must be given to Mrs Kalango for the efforts she put into this. […]

Nice one man. Congrats and welcome to the club.

Kwashiorkor.
The word came to you clearly amongst the jumble of whispers.
You sighed in exasperation. “I must really work hard, this my classmates go sabi book o. Abi, how dem take sabi uncle’s big grammar?”   […]

Hmmnnn…I guess you are right.

Fan-kini? Surely you dont expect me to come to that level, do you? And by the way, its not compulsory you take the beer na, just arrange, chikena!

I thought @olubunmi-adesuwa‘s entry stood out in terms of plot and denouement, as well as the unique second person narrative, but, apparently, Chika loved the brilliant writing we all have come to know @raymond […]

Who’s gonna give us a review of the work nah?! All of una wey download, no review? Abi make I write am sef? *thinks* I no sabi jo!

I do not think the guy who brought me here ever posted a thing on here! hehehehehehehehe. But he did me a whole lot of good. I submitted my first post expecting the worst but I apparently surprised myself. The […]

Why do I feel like I know the winner already? I think it will be a 2nd-person narrative. hehehehehehehehe.
Ray’s story rates high on plot, will def be in the top 5…
Why am I saying these things sef? It must […]

The imagination is there, as always. I think I expected more of the writing, feels like you might have had little time to write this after the amount of research.
Above all, this is very Raymond. Will like to […]

Something tells me this could be better. Maybe some conversations, maybe the beginning wasn’t necessary, maybe the allusion to non-fiction was too glaring, maybe, maybe, maybe.

I love the ending, but the body […]

Hmmnnnn… Denouement…

Not a short story piece, Henry….

*sings* All I want is your waist…!

hehehehehe

Hmnnnn.This is an assembly of the finest entries…I don’t envy Chika right now o. See work!

This is beautiful. Another one. Better use of the 2nd person, lucid narration, cool denouement. Best of luck…

*sighs. Best of luck

Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant. Good writing bro but just a line: you really shouldn’t have bothered with the translations, let the reader deduce whatever from it jare! Best of luck bro…

This, really, is good. You are a story teller. Let me break my rule here: italicise the flashbacks, those parts where the narrative voice becomes third person and this story would gleam with some brilliance. Check […]

Ooooooooohhhhhhh! Ahn! You have a story here but you stopped telling it at the most inappropriate moment! *sighs* Best of luck jo!

I see you are oneof them.; very sad. The size of a man determines a lot of things bro… i rest my case. @omojola

No, i didn’t enter. So much to do, so little time to do everything. I see you’ve made efforts to look through the piece again. Cool. There can be no perfect story, we all just dey try ni.

*sighs* best of luck.

*sighs* best of luck