Sonnet II

Sonnet II

What a life to be played in record;
a life of what lay beneath others
is an identity devoid of concord,
with two choices two sides that bothers.
Your star, how brightly, debate
your plans of fate dictate.
Sometimes of good emanate,
other times preachy by bed stand
your star is always what stand
A good morning whisper to joy.
A good day blossom without annoy,
the field a path with germination
Hopes led faith hostile to fate,
A download is mercy infinite.



13 thoughts on “Sonnet II” by Gabi (@Gabi)

  1. “A path with germination”

    Awesome line!

    1. Thanks @ufuomaotebele, nice to have you drop by!!!!

  2. It may sound a bit crazy, but I am sensing some kind of captivity in this, and someone trying to change destiny despite it…

    “What a life to be played in record;
    a life of what lay beneath others”

    We are considering this life of his (or hers), and the person was underrated

    “is an identity devoid of concord,
    with two choices two sides that bothers”

    There is no agreement (concord) in this form of existence within the one living this kind of life. And the two choices that bother him/her being to either live… And suffer the pain, or to kill oneself (which is by no means easy)

    “Your star, how brightly, debate
    your plans of fate dictate.
    Sometimes of good emanate,
    other times preachy by bed stand”

    Your good fortunes (your star) is at loggerheads with your fate, your good luck is clashing with the other fate for precedence
    (Ha ha ha ha ha… OMG… I just saw this now… No pun intended! LOL)

    “A good morning whisper to joy
    A good day blossom without annoy”

    It seems your lucky stars have triumphed over your unpleasant fate

    “the field a path with germination
    Hopes led faith hostile to fate
    A download is mercy infinite”

    I guess the middle line could read instead as “hopes led FATE-hostile to FAITH” because now it seems that fate gave way, hope holds sway and mercy abounds.

    This poem was superb @Gabi , even if it wasn’t strictly ten syllables per line, you made it work. The rhyming was also good.

    1. Thanks @anakadrian!

      Hopes led faith hostile to fate, ……….. puts faith of two kind and the faith led by hope is against fate.

      The stone life throws your way becomes the kungfu master that trains you waist to bend…..lol

      thanks as always Anak

      1. Ah, I see… Nice!

  3. @gabi you like book o, because your teacher taught you in jss3 that’s if you schooled in Nigeria, that sonnet has 14 lines, you practilise it, I bet there might someone who would not know the correlation between your title and poem.
    @anakadrian you don kukuma turn literature teacher, so see to meet such intellects.
    This is a real poetry that has a genre, a direction and strictly on the rules.
    @ufuomaotebele you chose to like the line that has something to do with farming, lol:-) :-) :-) :-)

    1. Woooooooow, I never thought that line will be interpreted exactly! (farming)

      and yes you can say that again but @anakadrian has don well to do the linking for every body that cares to read his comment first!
      Thanks for dropping by @ameenaedrees, seriously hope you keep doing this visits

    2. Err not really @ameenaedrees , I just like @Gabi ‘s poems and try to figure out what his intentions behind them were. If I guess right, he tells me… Look at his other poems, that’s just how we roll.

      Ha ha ha… no be about secondary school oh, @Gabi was on point. That’s just how sonnets are: a poem of usually ten syllables per line, and of fourteen lines.

  4. A captivating piece…

    1. Thanks @innoalifa, you just gave me blush all over my face!

      Nice to have you drop by.

  5. nice one Mr.I……………. :)

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