Moon Light!

 

Brightly colored you stood overhead my shoulders, given light to my foot-path. Glowing with venom accompanied by sweet whispering breeze you light my darkness. Sometimes you come out in great apple size, with attraction you let go every passing cloud. Gentle is your name, beauty your description, I stand stun to your value!

Everywhere I go, you are always there with me, in times of heart break you watch. My tear giving lighted path to flow, “cries it out, let go the pain just cry”. Night after nights I look forward to seeing you smile at me with all your misty cord. Night when you are gone I can but only get misty for you’re not there to take my pains

Moon light my lonely hour moments, where my thoughts gets purified. My dreams nurtured to hope, for I have met another chance to accomplishment! Reflection can only make acquaintance when your light throws me a shadow. Moon light my companion, my friend of a bitter truth



11 thoughts on “Moon Light!” by Gabi (@Gabi)

  1. The mind of the writer seems poetic, considering the use of words but the structural arrangement appears to be far, really far from an ideal poem.

    1. Yeah not the original arrangement! I had to adjust so it doesn’t look like the last poem “let’s meet again” still trying to find my way around word press! Need your comments on the idea and the composition the arrangements by line…….you need to see my manual script…….lol thank you very much for you dropping by….. do well to check out my other piece and let me know how better it can be!…….thanks

    1. @mbanefo thanks for dropping by! Nice to have you around

  2. Lol I thought this was about a special girl but hey! It was about the moon. The title said it but I read d it as if the person you were writing about was a female.

    Nice work again here. I have pinned you as not the 10 part series writer. I like your sweet poems though and this too.

    1. It has being 2year since I last wrote anything…….. checking out your write ups and others in NS, I am not too far from a 10 part piece…..lol

      @ufuomaotebele! Thank for your comment and It is really nice having you stop by

      1. @Gabi

        What I think your poem means

        “Brightly colored… given (sic) light to my foot-path…”

        It seems the presence of the moon gives you comfort.

        “…Glowing with venom accompanied by sweet whispering
        breeze…”

        Does the moon somehow scare you? Even though it at the same time gives you hope?

        “…Sometimes you come out in great apple size. With attraction you let go every passing cloud…”

        Still (possibly in admiration) trying to wrap your mind around the phenomenon of the moon

        “…Gentle is your name, beauty your description, I stand stun to your value!…”

        Okay, we’ve established that its admiration

        “…Everywhere I go, you are always there with me, in times of heart break you watch. My tear giving lighted path to flow…”

        You not only admire, but now you are grateful for the presence of the moon.

        “cries it out, let go the pain just cry”…”

        We’ve established that the presence of the moon comforts you.

        “…Night after nights I look forward to…your misty cord. Night…I can but only get misty for you’re not there to take my pains…”

        Such that now you have begun to anticipate it’s presence, and become upset without it

        “…Moon light…where my thoughts gets (sic) purified. My dreams..have met another chance to accomplishment!…”

        You believe the moon elevates your thinking and that you become a better person for it.

        “…Reflection can only make acquaintance when your light throws me a shadow…”

        So much that you feel you cannot think as deeply, without the comforting presence of the moon
        (Here I take “reflection” to mean your private thoughts)

        “…Moon light…companion…my friend of a bitter truth…”

        From comfort to admiration to anticipation…
        then to resignation in the sense of a bitter truth you cannot change.

        Or

        …to appreciation once again that the moon tells you stuff as it is, however unpleasant (“bitter truth”), trusting that you will never take it as an attack, and as a true companion does so solely out of goodwill.

        So Yeah, the ideas grew in a nice pattern. I give “Moon Light!” two thumbs up.

        1. Nicely explained, @anakadrian! I stand amaze seeing how you took your time to understand the poem like your where beside me when i was writing it. lol.

          Well back then the moon was almost every time to me it is deeper than just admiration.

          when i am thrown out of the house, and there is no friend non siblings to play with the Moon will always come to the rescue…lol i like to stick to your interpretation………..
          Thanks for your analogy on the Moon Light

  3. you are welcome my dear

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