The Root of the Alago People

The Root of the Alago People

The Alago people are found in Keana and Doma Local Government Areas of Nasarawa State, Nigeria.

She had only one day to get ready for the Amiri festival in thanksgiving to the ancestors for bumper harvests. With the sound of oke filling the atmosphere, her furtive observation of her father’s yam barn was cut short by the entrance of Ochealekwu, her deserted fiancée. He quickened the blood in her veins with his gaze as he gently and gingerly walked to where she stood. He had been in a distant village and had come home to give food and drink to his forebears like other adult members of the community.

“Ochealekwu, hope you didn’t miss your way home?” Onyakeche asked waspishly. She had every reason to be annoyed because he gallivanted off to the city with Elakeche, leaving her alone in the village after they were engaged.

“Why will you say such a thing? I’ve come to see you.” He responded calmly.

“Who is that bastard in my compound?” Onyakeche’s father roared like a lion. Grossly irritated at the sight of the young man, he pursued Ochealekwu out of his residence with a machete.

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As Onyakeche, alongside other maidens, walked into the dance arena during the festival, whining front and back according to the rhythm of the drumming, Ochealekwu’s eyes were on her. He stalked her after the festival and when she consented to listen to him, he asked her to be his wife. She rejected him. But he persisted and pleaded insistently, explaining that Elakeche whom everyone thought was his girlfriend was only his cousin sister. At last, Onyakeche accepted to marry him.

They got married and their union brought forth the father of the Alago people, Andoma Ogoshi Osabonya.



37 thoughts on “The Root of the Alago People” by innoalifa (@innoalifa)

  1. so brief! #passingby. Are u an indigene of Alago?

    1. @shovey, I intended to tell the story smoothly and completely without unnecessarily being verbose. Did you know anything about the Alago people before now?

      Thanks for reading :)

  2. Nice to discover new places, names, festivals etc.
    Could not even pronounce some of the names.
    Nice, I should Google the Ala go people.

    1. @ameenaedrees, better google about the Alago people as soon as possible because they are part and parcel of the great Nigerian people.

      I’m glad you stopped by dear :)

  3. Alago people… are they also in the igbo community?

    1. Wow! The Alago people are not part of the Igbo community. Rather, they are a minority ethnic group principally found in Keana and Doma Local Government Areas of Nasarawa State. They are an interesting people worth knowing about…

      Cheery thanks for not only reading and commenting but for asking an important question…

  4. @innoaliafa The only grey areas in this fiction that needs to be better polished are :
    1. the beginning of the story describing the alago people(the first paragraph) could have been constructed better than that…
    2. also, the last two paragraphs climaxed too soon… u could have added more words to make them all come together for the reader.

    I think if you can give it more review, it will be more creative than it is on this page.

    1. @aminat, hope you’ve grasped something about the Alago people?

        1. @aminat, that’s good to know dear…hoping to know more about you :)

  5. @innoalifa The only grey areas in this fiction that needs to be better polished are :
    1. the beginning of the story describing the alago people(the first paragraph) could have been constructed better than that…
    2. also, the last two paragraphs climaxed too soon… u could have added more words to make them all come together for the reader.

    I think if you can give it more review, it will be more creative than it is on this page.

    1. @samoluexpress, the advancement of literature is premised on literary criticism and appreciation. Bearing in mind my literary development as a budding writer, I humbly appreciate you for making your observations about the flash fiction. I wanted to only tell a complete story using as few words as possible.

      Thanks a million fellow!
      Your criticisms can only make me better.

  6. hmm, i tried finding information on the alago people, it seems theres little known about them, its always a beautiful thing to learn about new places.. thanks for the read

    1. @kevweodogun, I can’t but reassert and reaffirm the joy I feel discovering new people, things, places, culture, beliefs, traditions, folktales, folklore and world-systems. It’s true that there’s little known about the Alago people but like great ethnic cultures like Yoruba and Efik, the Alago people are an interesting group to know about. I think there’s more to be done to bring to the fore minority tribes such as the Alago, the Sho-Sho and many others.

      I really do appreciate your sharing your sentiments. It means so much to me.

  7. @innoalifa it’s too short now…you didnt give us enough insight

    1. My dear, I didn’t intend this to be long. All I wanted to achieve was to render a complete story using as few words as possible, I hope you understood the story about the history of the Alago people?

      @ayobare, I’m happy seeing you here…it’s been quite a while dear.

  8. I guess she only wants us to find out more about her village….lol…but too short

    1. @bookfreez, thanks for reading :)

  9. Trying to pronounce some of the names got me biting my tongue. I don’t envy their son at all with such a grandpa……hahaha

    Nice piece.

    1. Lol, you are much appreciated, @brytandre :)

  10. @innoalifa Started the piece like a novel … and i guess that caused the rushed conclusion…since the purpose of the piece is this… ‘All I wanted to achieve was to render a complete story using as few words as possible, I hope you understood the story about the history of the Alago people?’ like you stated above…i would say i truthfully didnt get to know anything concrete about the history of the Alago people from this piece and the story that i was starting to relax to enjoy was just too rushed …

    personally i feel this is one of your best pieces …as per writing style …and plot… and then you just had to rush it …(were you writing with a limit on your word count?) *just asking*

    i think a lil bit more length with the flow from the first section and we’ll have something really beautiful …trust me. this story is one that can be developed.

    1. Methinks this can be developed too and made really captivating.

      I appreciate your stopping by, @dees-hive :)

  11. Well done for trying your hand at flash fiction Inno.
    You don’t write flash fiction, right?
    I know how hard it is to write when your word count is so short. Is the max 200?
    I know you wanted to enter the contest but I will suggest that you write *exactly* the story in your head next time. Trim it down if you think that will work but in my experience writing to a word count turns your juice sour.
    Keep crafting @innoalifa

    1. Your suggestion is well-taken.
      Thanks a million dear, @olajumoke :)

  12. I tried writing a flash fiction of 100 words max once. It wasn’t easy.

    I deduced from the write-up that you wanted to write a full story in just a few words. That’s the mistake you made. Flash fiction is about picking and writing a particular story or scene using few words as possible and cutting off redundancies or unnecessary details whilst giving your piece the elements of a complete story. You should’ve penned down the whole story before proceeding to abridging it, could have made it easier for you.

    The storyline was ok, but it lacked that mouthwatering lustre that always accompanies a flash fiction, plus, it was brought to an abrupt end. Keep writing dear.

    1. working to create something better…your literary counsel was insightful.

      Thanks dear, @uzywhyte :)

  13. It ended too fast as I had just buckled my seat belt. I agree with @uzywhyte . You should do more justice to the story. Let the pieces fit. Maybe you can connect the festival to a significant part of their union, let us know why Onyakeche’s father dislikes him. If Adago does exist, I think you can do them proud, do more research and give us the story.
    It sure will make a good reading.

    1. I can’t thank you, @lildamey, and @uzywhyte enough. Your suggestions are well-received :) I can only learn to become better.

      1. You are welcome @innoalifa. We learn everyday, especially me.

        1. @lildamey, me too dear…
          we’re on the same page :)

  14. Evey story doesnt have to be a “War and Peace” ………@innoalifa, its good this way!!!!

    1. Thanks a million, @ugochuckwu :)

  15. Thank you for bringing a minority ethnic group to the fore. I haven’t heard of the. Alago people before, neither have I heard of the Amiri festival nor what an oke is. A lot has been said on how this story can be better; I’m not going to rehash them. I’ll just add that you could maybe check your use of adverbs e.g. ‘waspishly’, especially for flash fiction. Well done.
    P.S. I admire that you take criticism rather well, instead of going all the way to defend your work.

    1. @IdiAce, I’m really elated you’ve discovered some things that were hitherto unknown to you – the Alago people, the Amiri festival and even oke. I assure you that all the comments, observations, suggestions and corrections are well-taken and I’m using them as veritable ingredients in my evolving writings.

      Merci mille fois!

  16. Nice piece!, heard bout the alago ppl but dint know much bout them.now I know a lil.’ll try to know more. @innoalifa

    1. There were loads of them, you prolly missed out on a lot. Search on minority contest. @sultan

  17. Okay bro, will go on to check on them now @ugochuckwu

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