Benny

Benny

INTRODUCTION

Hey there,my name is Osarentin Benedicta Okoh but everyone calls me benny which i prefer anyway, i am tall for my age which is 9 years old, I am fair, I have brown eyes, and I am the first of two children. I just got admission into my dream school, lekki british school am now officially a big girl with all the perks atached to it (a new phone staying up to late with permission etc).

This story is all about the experiences that life throws at me beginning on my first at at school the problems I face while i am in school and outside of school. They are going to be funny, crazy, sad etc. Am going to make friends, enemies,and frenemies(friends +enemies) have multiple crushes(hey am a regular teenage girl),get a broken heart(hey it cant be high school without at least one heart break). So relax kick off your shoes and enjoy the ride bumbs included.

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5:30am

“Benny wake up its time for school” my mom shouted as she passed my room to go and mix my water for bathing”
Mrs Esosa Okoh was a dark skinned woman whose age is a state secret so it’s unknown but I guessed she was somewhere between 35 and 40.

God I did not want to wake up just five more minutes.

“Bennedicta Osarumwense Okoh will you get up this instant before I get a cane” she shouted at me in Benin.

That was the motivation I needed to get up I so did not want to feel pain this morning.I got up and went about my daily routine in a way that would have made a snail say “you are too slow”I was fully dressed and eating a breakfast of bread, butter and tea when my dad came in and sat at the table.

Mr Osamede Okoh was a tall light skinned man who looked younger than his 46 years of age.

“Good morning lamogun daddy” I greeted him in a mixture of Benin and English that made most people who heard laugh.

“I have heard my daughter” he answered me in Benin “so are you excited about your first day at school”

of course I was a bundle of nerves but I was not going to tell him that

“yes I am daddy”

“Good where is your brother Osarodion”

“He is still sleeping enjoying the last week of holiday he has”

“Ok let’s go I don’t want you to be late for your first day at school”

I carried my school bag which was beside my chair and followed my dad out the door my first day of school I wonder how it’s going to go.

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This is my first story on naija stories and I would not mind constructive criticism but please go easy on me.



8 thoughts on “Benny” by sia (@sarahmorgan)

  1. Hehehehe your comment at the end made me smile; we won’t bite. I am a fan of yours now.With all this Benin influx in this one story I think you will end up teaching me more about the place. Wait, your mom wakes you up at 5:30 a.m to get ready? Chai when do you sleep then. Gone are does days, the school bus wakes me up…

    First story, you’re nervous; I hope you are. I think reading other peoples work has seem to rub off well on you this was quite good. you stated your point which was to take us through the daily life of a teenager… now we don’t want this to read as if you are simply pouring out how you went through Monday to Saturday on a paper, we need some creativity maybe a of little fiction wouldn’t hurt. The ends of your dialogues seem to all lack a period(.) Hey, you’re 9? and have taken a passion for writing? Double thumbs up to you. Oya back to the matter, this part was extremely short for me to even pick out errors so I am hoping on reading the second episode soon.

    Good luck namesake!

  2. sia (@sarahmorgan)

    Thanks a lot for the encouragement. am actually older than 9 oh. Noted about the period and length will work on that in subsequent chapters.

    1. Oh sorry its noted now…

  3. I’m, not am. Please take note.

    1. ok thanks

  4. @ufuomaotebele ……hehe, good for yhu, sometimes i wake by 4 or even spend the whole night awake.
    Bout the story tho’, its better as non-fiction @sarahmorgan, it’ll help you feel yourself more in the story….fill in as much detail that happened as possible evenif you think its odd and yeah, the punctuations were awfull but im sure yhu’d work on it. ;)

    1. thanks for commenting I will work on the punctuations in subsequent chapters

  5. Nice one! Lol @ ur last statement but really, criticisms will really help a lot, and the story is too short for a start.

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