Tell Her Something Sweet

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Tell her something that she will soon not remember.
Words that will blow over her gently
She would sway and then stagger ever so slightly
To pleasant vocabulary which truly has no meaning.

Though they be the most tired of repetitions
-evidence of your disinterest to spare her a creative thought-
This observation will concern her not
As it is of less priority than her thirst for your attention.

Tell her something classic and romantic.
Perhaps a line from some movie you’ve watched?
Of greater importance is that she giggle & is touched
And either pretend or believe that you are not pathetic.

An English student with honors, recycling words in each sentence,
Obtuse and braggadocios about how you make her ‘trip’.
For all your tired and unintelligent little fibs,
I will soon mete out my vengeance.

Tell her something sweet,
Keep playing the deciever.
From you, i will soon deliver her…
And then your worthless words you can eat.

*Inspired



25 thoughts on “Tell Her Something Sweet” by Kwiksie (@kwiksie)

  1. Hmmm, I knew that sought of ending was coming……….guys, can decieve her with words they feel she needs to hear…….and she so naive will sway along with the words, smiling as if shes really found the right man this time!
    sweet words from the wrong mouth will come bitter.

    girl…….I felt this one. keep them coming.

    1. Thanks dear @ufuomaotebele
      Guess what? Na your Jola inspire me one kind oh. lol. I got so vexed with her that i ended up writing. :)

      1. Ooh nice………..I can really see bits and piece of Jola in this……….really glad we made an impact on this lovely poem….

  2. kay (@kaymillion)

    Decieved?
    Wonderful lines…… Waiting for more

    1. Thank you @kaymillion. Glad you stopped by. :)

  3. @kwiksie, this is captivating
    and excellently written
    not forgotten its sweetness
    as even the title suggests……………..

    1. *smiling, thanks @innoalifa for your ever colourful compliments.
      :)

      1. @kwiksie you’re forever welcome. I’ll appreciate your checking out my poem at http://www.naijastories.com/2014/06/y-junction/ and commenting, good or bad.

        Cheery thanks dear :) :)

        1. Done. You’re welcome.

  4. O-Money (@Omoniyi-Adeshola)

    @kwiksie, ah well, I really should not be surprised anymore when you write great nice pieces like this. Well done, Kwiksie

    1. Hehe. Thanks so much @Omoniyi-Adeshola, glad you could stop by.
      :)

  5. A girl’s smile can mean a whole lot of things

    1. Aint it the truth? @uzywhyte

  6. @kwiksie this is a well written piece but leaves in its trail a lot of questions for me…whose voice are we listening to? the body of the poem screams this is a female voice but the last 2 lines
    ‘From you, i will soon deliver her…
    And then your worthless words you can eat.’
    suggests the voice cud be from a male (deliver her ?) or is the voice that of a lesbian lover who is angry her partner is tripped by the sweet words of a male admirer? (just questions that the piece raises for me)
    Women will always be tripped by sweet nothings (Words) as long as Men will be stirred up by well sculptured, glorified sand with make-up (Looks) …its just the way life is…
    Don’t tell her something sweet and get prepared to lose her to someone who will…

  7. @Dees-hive your observation is very apt (as concerns majority of the poem’s voice sounding feminine).
    But then, i am female aren’t i? lol.
    Anyway, I’d begun writing as though i were personally speaking to the one addressed but then decided a ‘He’ would be better suited to come to her rescue. (Really cool that you got the difference)
    I beg to differ though (at your comment) about women ALWAYS being tripped by sweet nothings. I, for one, don’t fall into that category.
    You can tell her sweet words without them being empty, insecere or worse, mere flattery.
    Thanks for stopping by and contributing.
    :)

  8. For all the guys that use sweet words to deceive women, there is GOD.

    1. Helep me tell them oh! @ameenaedrees
      Now kwiksie is telling the girls; “Have sense now, let God help you! Will you keep quiet?! Chaiii.”

  9. Really nice piece.
    @dees-hive already commented about the change in tone so I won’t go there.
    Well done!

    1. @efeedosio Thank you so much for stopping by. Glad you picked up on the tone thingy too.

  10. I was pleasantly surprised by the third line in the last stanza. Didn’t see that twist coming at all. Nice work. :)

    1. Nice to know we managed to get those brows of yours raised. Lol. Thank you for reading.

  11. If she that’s being decieved do not know, at least the deciever with words will know.

    Thinking…

    1. Lol @newnaija you got that right. Thanks for reading and commenting.

  12. Thanks Kwiksie. I have been a real truant here, hope to kickstart my presence here again soon.

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