I Heard You

I knew who you were before my eyes knew sight.

At the very moment from my cell-lined carriage i did alight;

I knew you, as the thorn knows its rose;

It must have been your calm…

It called to me I suppose.

 

I knew you, needless of any introduction

The love echo cocooning me performed that function.

Unsure of the other sounds,

I was attentively tuned to the background silence;

That which the solo of your heart beat orchestrated.

 

I knew you for your voice I have always heard.

Your infuriated ‘NO’ rang out when they suggested my death.

The soothing warmth of your palms, oft seeped through to me

And with each shielding came a certainty renewed-

That come what may, I’d never be torn from you.

 

I knew you from the start of this journey we’ve made,

In my container was the fullness of my love also contained.

And though mentally murdered in an instant

By the totality, less a few,

A tenant unwanted; your love held fast for us two.

 

By blows from spite bulging slander and slashes from cutting silence

You, within and without, ceaselessly were wounded.

But when you faced each of their contemptuous gazes squarely,

With what must be the firmest of spines;

That was precisely when your voice sounded most loudly.



20 thoughts on “I Heard You” by Kwiksie (@kwiksie)

  1. Hmmm.

    Interesting. Is this about childbirth?

    Maybe if I understood I’d be able to comment more meaningfully.

  2. This is really touching, i enjoyed it. gracias.

    1. @lactoo, thanks! I’m glad you like it. :)

  3. @SeunOdukoya, you’re pretty close. :)
    Sorry. I’d thought of commenting a brief explanation behind but didn’t want to spoil it for those who’d prefer analyzing.
    Summary is, she got pregnant in a non-socially acceptable way (whatever comes to your mind works). She’s pressurized to abort; doesn’t give in.
    The poem’s her unborn child speaking of being aware of it and acknowledging her sacrifice.
    C’est finis.

    1. I like the way you write kwiksie- a mix of vintage and modern, so i think. Really like it.

      1. Glad you like @jofiak, thanks plenty….
        I love Shakespeare though so perhaps that’s a contributory factor. ;)

  4. Fascinating…well done.

    1. @Nur’ayn , thank you. :)

  5. O-Money (@Omoniyi-Adeshola)

    @kwiksie, you did good here, and the first verse was very good. Loved it.

    1. Thanks @O-money, i’m very glad you enjoyed it. :)

  6. lovely first stanza

    1. @Sunshine , thank you!
      ….but does that mean you don’t like the rest??
      ;)

  7. This is really beautiful…I like the concept. You write really well.

    1. Wow, @Rachel_Williams ,such kind words…thank you!
      So glad it appealed to you. :)

  8. nice one my their… but still needs a little knowledge of how to rhyme your poem… thank you

    1. I really didn’t plan it to be a ‘rhyme-every-line’ kinda poem though…but then, it might have made the piece better. Who knows? ;)
      @mbafeno, thanks for reading and commenting.

  9. beautifully rendered

    1. I appreciate that @innoalifa, thank you.
      :)

      1. @kwiksie, you’re welcome………….. Keep pushing on……..

  10. okay, I seriously thought i was done reading until i saw your tags “rape, abortion.” i realized i did not get any of that at first read. had to scroll back up to grab the full gist.

    Really touching.

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