What is Your Nakedness to Me?

What is Your Nakedness to Me?

What is your nakedness to me?
It is not as it used to be!
That flash
That flush
Of blood rioting in my veins
Tearing apart tissues to inflict sweet
pains.
What have you done
That equals to none?
It is not lack of fertility,
It is not infidelity;
The first I could easily forgive,
With the second I could manage to live.
What is your nakedness to me?
It is not what I used to see!
That smooth, flat tommy
Those tall legs, and erect body,
The two pointed breasts
That resurrects in me a thousand
beasts!
What happened to you behind my back
That made those breasts slack?
Why can’t they stand forever?
Is it nothing you have power over?
Yet, even if everything is removed,
I’ll never forget that nakedness I
cherished and loved.



41 thoughts on “What is Your Nakedness to Me?” by Chime221 (@Chime221)

  1. Bola (@basittjamiu)

    Wow! This is great. I love the way you present the poem, bringing that emotion to the fore. Bravo!

    Welcome!

    1. Thanks dear, I’m glad you liked it

    2. Indeed things do change and that’s the agony as well as the sweetness of life: the fact that it’s fleeting.
      ♧:)ƭћǟπƙ-U:)♧ for stopping by and leaving a comment.

  2. Bola (@basittjamiu)

    Things change and when they do they will never be the same again. Nothing last forever.

  3. Definitely yo best so far.

    Well done.

    1. Did you say that sir? Wow! I need a mirror, cos I feel I’m blushing.

  4. Nice poem…. But are you really expecting all things to be thesame??
    change is constant

    1. Obviously sir, all things can never be the same. Besides, the poem did not suggest that.
      Thanks for airing your point.

  5. Turn green if u like, bad boy.

  6. nice piece. very believeable as change occurs very often.

    1. @bunmiril, Ɣε̲̣̣̣̥s
      You are on point. ♧:)ƭћǟπƙ-U:)♧ for stopping by.

    1. Thanks your sir…for your comment

  7. Unbelievable in retrospect but he convinced me it is quite believable.

    1. Thank you, (let me skip †ђξ sir)
      For your comment, and thanks for believing.

  8. Jo (@josephoguche)

    Nice output here

    1. Thanks a bunch for coming around

      1. Jo (@josephoguche)

        Welcome bro

  9. na waooo. this is adult poem.

    1. Thank you for coming around. The poem is for mature minds only. Lol. But it’s definitely not erotic which means the same thing with your ‘adult’, am I right?

  10. I like the content, not so much its structural packaging. Can you do something about making the structure tighter? Paragraphs and rearranging words may help.
    Well done, Chime.

    1. @Sibbylwhyte, thanks a handful. I’ve already done the paragraph. About rearranging words, I’ll seriously look into it. Your advice is always treasured. ♧:)ƭћǟπƙ-U:)♧.

  11. Of course, nothing remains the same forever.
    Change is one thing that makes life beautiful.

    1. You are on point, I share your view. Thank you @Estee, your comment is appreciated.

  12. Hmmmmm! Hope no problem sir cos this poem look seriously real o. Kudos.

    1. Yes Oº°˚˚°º! All is very well. It’s not a personal experience. The muse simply took the better part of my mind and this is the outcome.
      Lol. Thanks for your comment.

    1. Thank you dear. Your words are encouraging.

  13. Morning rose

    1. I see. Thanks for reading and commenting.

  14. I see why it made the Editor’s pick, great work Chime.

    1. Thanks boss…I appreciate your nice comment.

  15. Thanks boss…I appreciate your nice comment.

  16. Reality check: /What happened to you behind my back
    That made those breasts slack?
    Why can’t they stand forever?
    Is it nothing you have power over?
    Yet, even if everything is removed,
    I’ll never forget that nakedness I
    cherished and loved./

    This man is a true lover!!! Well done man,I like absolutely!!!

    1. Hahahahaha…there’s an audience for every work of art. For this particular one, especially the lines you quoted above, it’s targeted at those men that leaves their wives for younger girls, owing probably because they think they no more see what they used to see in their wives.
      Thanks @Sambrightomo

  17. @Chime221, I am not entirely sure d rhetorical question “whaat is your nakedness to me” doesn’t contradict d last line about never forgetting it. Anyway, that’s just a thought. I also think breaking the poem into stanzas won’t be a bad idea. A typo, ‘tummy’ not tommy

    1. Obviously dear, it does not. I noticed that the narrator already knows the answers to each rhetorical question asked, and he answered them.
      Thanks @Omotala, especially for the indicated typo. All other errors mentioned herein have been rectified, I’ll sure affect this one.
      Thanks again.

  18. @Chime 221, this is tight.

    1. Thanks a bunch @six, glad it caught your fancy.

  19. quite revealing…………..lovely

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