Musings of a Rogue Bachelor: III

“That girl would slip through your fingers,” my mother said. “It’d be stupid of you.”

“And what makes you think so?” I asked her.

“Well, you know, she’s too patient with you, she understands you, and she’s caring. She’s the only one who’s persevered till this time despite your missing in action and disappearing acts,” mother told me. “God, she loves you.”

“Absolutely,” I said. “And I would like to point out that our wedding plans are underway.”

“Underway? I don’t like that word. That’s what you said last time, before bolting to Somalia; and the last, before disappearing to God knows where.”

“Mom, don’t be so condescending.”

“Condescending? Me?” she seemed startled if not hurt. “I am your mother, and I need you to…”

“Marry.” I finished for her.

“Seems like you still remember.”

That got my father’s attention who had been playing fence-sitter all along.

“We want to see our grandchildren before we die,” he chimed in. “Look at your peers – Joseph, Peter and David – they all have grown kids.”

“Yeah, and that’s because I am too busy for such a life. Military ain’t the career for the family I want.”

“And what’s that?” asked my mother.

“I don’t want to be an absentee father and husband.”

“Cecilia understands this, and she loves you the way you are. Can’t you recognize gold when you strike one?”

“Mom, I am too busy right now,” I said. “If you’ll excuse me, I’ve got a plane to catch.”

 

Copyright ©Vincent de Paul, 2013.

 

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36 thoughts on “Musings of a Rogue Bachelor: III” by Vincent de Paul (@vincentdepaul)

  1. Spoken like a true bachelor,off 2 conquer the world.

    1. @jade69, you are right. He really is a bachelor.

    2. Really @jade69? Thanks for reading and commenting.

  2. Daireen (@daireenonline)

    This story’s dialogues ehn…

    How can the mother be condescending when she apparently doubted the speaker? And you should have written ‘under way’ not ‘underway’.

    Keep writing, you have something, polish it till it glitters.

    1. Thanks @daireenonline for reading and commenting. I appreciate

  3. @daireenonline…. I agree with you 100%, @vincentdepaul should go for it.

  4. This is really good, tight writing, fluid dialogue. Keep it up

  5. nice but could be better….
    well done

    1. thanks @topazo… shall polish as @daireenonline says.

  6. My problem is you bring it in bits, before I have time to form a stable opinion bout the story, it ends.
    So you are a bachelor? Better do and marry o..
    Well done, Vince. $ß.

    1. @sibbylwhyte… Guess that’s why it’s called flash fiction

    2. @sibbylwhyte…. thanks for reading and comenting, that’s my plan (lol).

  7. @elovepoetry. Even though it’s not tagged as such, guess it’s just that; a flash in the reading pan.

  8. Oh my @sibbylwhyte, my mistake, I thought I had already tagged it like that, guess it was an oversight. Thanks.

    1. @vincentdepaul, mistakes are not allowed.

    1. Thanks @sucess001 for reading.

  9. I actually liked this , enjoyed it please kindly give me links to the previous installments.

    1. @LEROY, i think if you click on the ‘read all posts by this author’ link you would see the earlier posts, but let @vincentdepaul do that. I am just but helping.

      1. Gracias @elovepoetry. So gracious of you to give me the one-up.

        1. Thanks for reading and commenting @LEROY, I think Elove has answered you what I would have told you. @elovepoetry, thanks for being my damsel in shining amor.

  10. Jo (@josephoguche)

    Keep flying …

    1. Shall do so @josephoguche. Thanks for reading

      1. Jo (@josephoguche)

        Welcome

  11. Short,sharp and nice,I like it

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