My knowledge, My ambition

My knowledge, My ambition

Hello!
It is shallow
I will take it slow
I will let it flow
It may not come tomorrow
I will stay and wallow
With no pain or sorrow
I will be studious like my fellow
Sometimes I may look cowardly or yellow
I know it is temporal I shall follow
I will let it grow
I wont fall for the show
I will sit and mellow
And when a sweat comes to my brow
I will fan and blow
Because I want to know
I really want to know
Be knowledgeable like the vastest snow
Until then, I shall reap what I sow
For now,
Cheerio!



19 thoughts on “My knowledge, My ambition” by Bola (@basittjamiu)

  1. At line three, I nearly interpreted it differently.

    Nice poem.

    1. Bola (@basittjamiu)

      hehehe! thanks for the comments.
      how did you interpreted your line three? @jaywriter( I wan know o hehe)

  2. Mad rhyming, lol. This is cool… I’m no expert at poetry, but this is nice. I like the message too

    1. Bola (@basittjamiu)

      hehehe!
      thanks @olan.

  3. khadijahmuhammad (@khadijahmuhammad)

    Great rhyming. The rhythm flows.The poem is nice.You don’t need the hello.For now and cheerio.Keep improving your art.

  4. Bola (@basittjamiu)

    hehehehe! thanks @khadijahmuhammed.

  5. i am lol for now, in the bidto follow the flow..ahahahah…. i like this rhyme

    1. Bola (@basittjamiu)

      hehehe, I am glad you like.
      thanks @owseaman

  6. I like the idea of the reward coming to the patient. @basittjamiu.

    Some lines worked well, like

    “And when a sweat comes to my brow
    I will fan and blow
    Because I want to know”

    It made me imagine someone who was putting a lot of effort into trying to achieve something.

    For others, it looked like you were ‘rhyming by force’, like

    “Be knowledgeable like the vastest snow”

    I don’t know that snow is knowledgeable.

    Or the first two lines, which you could have removed without making a difference to the poem.

    Keep writing.

    1. Bola (@basittjamiu)

      thanks, @tolaO.
      glad some lines work for you.

      the use of personification is what I was trying infer to the snow.
      (personification: is a figure of speech, prosopopeia, in which an inanimate object or an abstraction is given to human qualities.)

      thanks, you rocks.@tolaO.

      1. @basittjamiu
        Even if u did personify the snow, the snow isn’t known to be an embodiment of knowledg so I dnt tnk it fits…..

  7. @basittjamiu
    Even if u did personify the snow, the snow isn’t known to be an embodiment of knowledg so I dnt tnk it fits…..

    1. Bola (@basittjamiu)

      hehehe thanks anyway.@tooazo.
      *smiling*

  8. Nice rhymes, though not all flowed with the poem…..

  9. @basittjamiu
    I love this…………………..

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