Oct 312012
Dug by the shovels of the mind…
That dark brightness
Where the eyes cannot see…
That emptiness, yet filled
With fears and wilted hopes…
That strangling shadow
That stays even in the glare of light…
It shall remain
Until you wake up and see
That holes can be filled
And shadows wait to be lightened!
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xikay @xikay
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I think you’re talking about loneliness and how we strive to fill that gulf inside each and every one of us…
I like. Nice.
@Seun-Odukoya You are very right about the gulf inside…but its not only loneliness…there’s more. Thanks for coming by
@xikay I fink @Seun-Odukoya nailed theme…the visual suggests more and if I know u well enough, I’ll say there is more.
Do I see barrenness?
Well, I am following the visual and the words as used.
All in all, nice piece. All I can say to it. It is deep. Like u held so much back….
@shaifamily you are always suspicious…but seriously, you are right. This is as much about failure and bareness as it it about loneliness…and other yearnings
@xikay me? Suspicious…? Ah!!!
Yeah! Much held back, the reader left to give whatever meaning he/she finds appropriate.
“With fears and wilted hopes…That strangling shadow” Shouldn’t the latter part of this line be on another line? Yes? No?
For me, I see the loss of a dear one, a void left unfilled by the physical awaiting some spiritual satiation; the poet looking ahead to some sort of resurrection…
Your head is always there bro…
Niceee!
@banky the poem is not properly arranged my brother. See the correct version below
@Admin…please help out with my poem again… its twisted up
That hole inside,
Dug by the shovels of the mind…
That dark brightness
Where the eyes cannot see…
That emptiness, yet filled
With fears and wilted hopes…
That strangling shadow
That stays even in the glare of light…
It shall remain
Until you wake up and see
That holes can be filled
And shadows wait to be lightened!
@xikay, This has been corrected now. I suggest you try to preview your posts before you submit so we do not have these mix-ups.
I always preview my posts @admin seriously… Thank you very much.
There should be a name for that hole. I can totally relate to the yearnings and cravings that is hard to identify not to talk of satisfying.
Respect.
Na so Oga @kaycee
I like the potential of this poem. My interpretation of it would be about self-doubt and the many elements surrounding it.
You are very correct @midas