Three times your call did come
Like a shot rifling through the fluffy distance
Wedging us apart. Twice I did miss it
I, the terrible call-keeper, heavy-sleeper
With clumsy fingers and rigid reflexes
Timing betrayed calling
And I saw them (the missed calls) all………
Your call came in the small hour
When the looming largeness of our variegated (viable, pipe, phantom, and dreamy) dreams still lay dormant
In the surreal soil, impotent to soil the pristine day
Breaking from the shell of night, its varginal charm
The agitated phone rang, and rang itself to calm, silence
Its cry too weak to pierce through the cozy cocoon of sleep that enwrapped me
Your call came again, for the second time
In the still of the night
While dead silence that betrays needle-drop
Held the earth in its cold grip
The gay phone sang and danced,
Its tuneful song too timid to rouse me
From the depths of sleep
And it danced, danced itself to death
I’d drifted beyond the line of recall
And it came for the third time
The inky shroud of night cloaking the bluish
Counterpane above, fairly furled
Brightness billowed in the drizzly dawn
While I was disentangling my skin
From the skein of sleep
Bleary-eyed, I deciphered not the displayed digits of the incoming call
Butter-fingered, my left-thumb fumbled on the “ok” key
I managed to utter a stark “HELLO” before my voice trailed off and the phone dropped.
As I grasped the scepter of wakefulness again,
In the full glare of dawn, I saw the tell -tale mark of my phone’s frustrated attempt,
The exhausted breath, in the throes of rousing me coalesced stiff, like rigor mortis on its screen – “2 missed calls” and a futile received call.
Awesome.
@kola, I really like some of the lines (like a shot riffling through…).Your use of vocabulary is awesome.However some of the lines are too long for me (I managed to utter…). I would remove the parenthesis after variegated.I don’t think it adds anything. Also I would definitely change the word “gay” unless it was put there on purpose. And what is “varginal”?Did you mean “virginal” Overall I think that if you would work on it, it would be great.Good job!
@kaycee, you’re getting soft man!
Good work!
I missed some lines….
@jefsaraurmax @kola Jeff said the word.
Nice work.
I liked this , a lot, but there could be some tightening and it seems to end too abruptly. Great language and ABSOLUTELY everyday.Good Job!
I can totally relate with this… Good
This is something, really. Nice work and good luck.
Interesting piece…Well done kola…$ß.
Good
Apt attention to details and aesthetic use of language.Quite imaginative.Well done