Is The Heaven Real? An Acrostic
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Is The Heaven Real? An Acrostic

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If facing the skies the fish cannot heaven see.

Scientists sky-rocket and yet nothing see

 

The tail looks like moonlight tale

How could I see you without that long sleep?

Ending a man in the invisible realms of the tale?

 

High above the skies they say you are

Even the flying birds cannot see you

Above the cloudy smoke of sky settles you

Vary comfortable like the king you are

Every day we crave for you

Not death to sea but you just you.

 

Rooming myriads of men with wings

Eerie invincible white men like kings

Aren’t there ebony black men that you keep?

Little shall we know until we sleep?



14 thoughts on “Is The Heaven Real? An Acrostic” by adams (@coshincozor)

  1. Seun-Odukoya (@Seun-Odukoya)
    June 21, 2012 at 7:01 am  

    I get the generally idea, but it was confusing in some parts.

    Nice.

    1. adams (@coshincozor)
      July 4, 2012 at 3:17 pm  

      thanks

      1. Sueddie Agema (@sueddie)
        July 28, 2012 at 1:23 am  

        Hey! @seun-odukoya was asking for some general idea – even a two liner would help. :) Abi?

  2. Obisike (@obiaguomba)
    June 21, 2012 at 7:17 am  

    hmmmn. Nice one with the flow. Nice one with the acrostic. Me too, I want to see God. As for the long sleep, abeg, not yet.

    1. adams (@coshincozor)
      July 4, 2012 at 3:23 pm  

      thanks for the read bro

  3. lactoo (@louis)
    June 21, 2012 at 11:44 am  

    Hahahaha. Enjoyed it.

  4. shaifamily (@shaifamily)
    June 21, 2012 at 10:18 pm  

    Uhmmmmm, I dunno sha.

  5. mikeeffa (@mikeeffa)
    June 22, 2012 at 5:28 am  

    every body wants to go to heaven where we shall see God- well it will be in His own time – good work the reality of heaven is well spelt out

  6. Chimzorom (@chimzorom)
    June 23, 2012 at 3:28 pm  

    [Vary] comfortable like the king you are- is that meant to be “very”?
    Good issue.

  7. Chimzorom (@chimzorom)
    June 23, 2012 at 3:28 pm  

    [Vary] comfortable like the king you are- is that meant to be “very”?
    Good issue.

    1. adams (@coshincozor)
      July 4, 2012 at 3:12 pm  

      maybe, thanks for pointing that out but i cant really remember what i intended to say in that poem. it was written years ago

    2. adams (@coshincozor)
      July 4, 2012 at 3:13 pm  

      maybe! Thanks for pointing that out but i cant really remember what i intended to say in that poem. It was written years ago

  8. Sueddie Agema (@sueddie)
    July 28, 2012 at 1:28 am  

    Among other things, ‘The tail looks like a moonlight tale’? Haba! Do give thoughts on that. Looks ‘fishy’ :)
    Different poems evoke different messages to the reader – that is the beauty of that genre. The varying tales rendered from the compactness. Everyone sees going to see the Almighty from your lines. I saw different. I saw nature, beauty, and life in varying shades. I saw philosophical ponderings and at some point, a thoughtful musing on the thoughtlessness and issues of living.
    Oh well… Sometimes even we the parents of these pieces write something and discover later that they bring us something totally different.
    I would ask a little reworking… but on the whole, well done Adams. Well done.

    1. adams (@coshincozor)
      July 30, 2012 at 8:46 pm  

      thanks bro

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