my crimes are the actions of others
and my tears are for the pains of another
i could stand alone
as i browse the shelf
but i’m never at naytime
all by myself
because there’s a crowd in me
saying words and doing things
for which i sometimes get praised
and the consequencies of some
i bear in good faith
in the crow is the child
with the golden smile
never dreamt of growing up wild
but did anyway in short while
caught in the web of intrigues
he cried out “NOT GUILTY”!
never heard
condemned to silence
his golden smile slowly
disolves into salty tears
that stains the years
its his tears i cry sometimes
when i smile
in the crowd is the young man
who found the VOICE
and spoke at top of his lungs
“kisses are lies clothed
in passion to hide
the treason committed against
the hearts of the innocents”
so they looked at me strangely
cos he said
and i said
my hands are shaking
but my heart is baking
from all the things i shouldn’t be saying
now youa are looking at me
and the crwod is looking at me too
yet now i can see quite easily
now i know waht the child felt
and what the young advocate meant
becasue the crowd i see
is not just a crowd in me
its the other sides of me.
The crowd in you..do you refer to alter egos or the personalities in one?..
Anyways, I feel you have something here, but you would have to Edit this again..
There are spelling errors and you have to capitalise your I’s…Keep writing and Welldone… $ß
What she said.
Hmm. So the voices in your head are making you do things you don’t want to eh? you know, you can shut them up or ignore them instead of allowing them control you. I like the idea and the title was what attracted me being that I am involved in a constant battle for my mind with my own inner ‘crowd’ (I’ve been coming out victorious of late). Bubbly has pointed out your flaws (and they are oh, so many). I personally would suggest you talk to admin so you can correct them.
Thumbs up.
gud poem bt so many typos. i almost got lost here ‘in that /crow/ a child’
nice Bro!
Such WWE Superstar R Truth has got?
Nice job.