Return of the prodigal son

Return of the prodigal son

3 PM, Christmas Eve, 2011. Mpape, Abuja.
I sat cross-legged on the ground pondering whether to pick the call or not. There was no doubting who it was. I’d lost count of the number of calls from her yet its intensity had only grown with every passing day. Its effect on my psyche in light of my present mental preoccupation was enough reason not to entertain them. Yet, as if braced for the contest, the phone’s screen lit up over and over as her calls persisted. It was good old mom. Eventually, I gave in and muttered into the phone, “Hello mom”. Without bothering to ask why I’d been ignoring her calls, asked the same haunting question; “When are you coming home for Christmas”? The excuse of a heavy workload didn’t hold steam anymore. Tired of my struggling facade of faith where nothing was, I buckled in humility opening up about my financial lack. To that, mom simply responded, “I’ll transfer twenty thousand naira to your account. Journey mercies”.
An hour later, I stood in front of the GTB ATM in Area 11, slotted in my ATM card, withdrew the money paid in by mom and proceeded to the bus park in Utako. It was to be a “good night Abuja, good morning Lagos” approach.

Like the Biblical prodigal son, I was returning home without fulfilling the promises I’d made to myself and family 2 years after departing Lagos for the FCT where I’d been posted for the NYSC. In a nutshell, I’d begun my business from the comfort of my aunt’s home in Garki with whom I stayed during my service year and continued from the one room apartment I secured in Mpape afterwards.
Two years on, I’d seen it all: broken promises, unredeemed pledges, unfulfilled contracts and corruption. Entrepreneurship surely goes beyond theories. Much like a practical game of chance where every venture is a risk with results best described as Boolean: win or lose. From experience, it’d now dawned on me that not even the bestsellers in business can perfectly prepare one for what lies out here; an obvious truth in a society as peculiar as ours. How could one quantify the sordid effects of dearth in values, infrastructural decay amongst other societal challenges except when you come face to face with them? A society where directives from one man distinguished only by a privileged position is all it takes to make or mar a start-up. A society where hard work like so many virtues is hardly rewarded? Yet, what can a man do but stand up with conviction to the challenges? After the bitter pills that left me broke and shamed, I didn’t want to return home. I couldn’t stand the thought of having to resort to lifelines from pensioner parents who’d done their part in getting me this far.

Yet, things didn’t get off on this note.

2 years ago.
My last days in UNILAG, Akoka were ones of joy. 5 years plus the extra length brought about by incessant strikes was finally culminating in a first degree honors in Civil Engineering; no mean feat in a public institution where the hallmarks of a derelict education system played out. Yet, the irony was that it wasn’t the reason I was basking in joy. Rather, my euphoria lay in the fact that I was finally breaking free to do what my heart most desired. Yes, no more compelling reasons to study dy/dx! I was finally free to venture into the world of entrepreneurship given my interest in computer animation. Thus, as I tossed my graduating cap into the air, it marked my freedom. With my NYSC posting came the opportunity to venture out to the nation’s capital, far from the lot of most of my peers who’d been posted to less developed states that make up the bulk of our Nation Nigeria.

7 AM, Christmas Day, 2011; Lagos Island, Lagos.
As I walked into my family’s compound, the aroma of mom’s cooking laced with seasoning filled the air. It was past 8am. Mom wasted no time in throwing her hands around me. Aunts, uncles, siblings joined in. Even dad’s excitement was hardly concealable in the manly attitude with which he welcomed me. I was deeply touched. I’d really missed seeing my family. She hurried me into the bathroom for a shower in time to join the family for church service. A newly sewn guinea brocade had been ironed and laid waiting on the bed for me. I felt so special.

Virtues of the Christmas season and need for Christians to imbibe them formed the theme of the sermon. Afterwards, the thanksgiving went into full swing with a mix of local praise songs and dance steps. At a point, the guy next to me grabbed a piece of plastic chair and up; into the air he lifted it, dancing and sweating away what seemed like the stress and worries of life. Everywhere I looked, it was the same scene. There was so much joy and happiness. For the moment, all that pointed to sorrow drowned in joy; joy to be alive, hale and hearty. Where were the sad memories? Disappointments: its sting lost, shamed and trampled upon by an electrified congregation. Everyone seemed ecstatic. It didn’t matter that the economic situation of the country was having a tight grip on the masses. The immediate future was pretty obvious with government’s adamant position to hands-off fuel subsidy even at the expense of the masses and popular opinion. Self-centered politicians whose ignorance translates to mass sufferings: shamed. We didn’t care! Surely, they’d all been shamed.
I was not left out. All those greedy businessmen who in their acts of illegality had taken from me what was due me after I’d expended my sweats and resources: shamed.

Christmas was here in our hearts and with it hopes of a better tomorrow.


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13 thoughts on “Return of the prodigal son” by getto (@technobayo)

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    ablyguy (@francis): Senior Scribe - 21648 pts

    Good story.

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    Dowell Oba (@dowell): Scribe - 10033 pts

    You sure have a smooth flair for writing. Excellent story!

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    Scopeman (@scopeman60): Head Wordsmith - 50315 pts

    This read more like a rant about the nation’s predicament at the moment, not an actual nostalgic story. I merely enjoyed the writing though, but it didn’t quite work for me in the scope of the theme of the contest.

    Good luck.

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      Sueddie Agema (@sueddie): Head Wordsmith - 47918 pts

      @Scopeman, hmm, yeah, you do have a point. Boy does his writing and honesty hide that blemish :) Well, maybe if he decides to polish this a bit, it would come out better. What do you think? @technobayo, I would like to suggest that you add something to this tale. Try to bring in some old Christmas and how it used to be. It would be really nice if the part you add is something believable…For instance here, you can add the Christmas of two years ago which I believe was spent with the family. The whole joy and expectation of leaving and hopes of what you were going to expect…Then, Christmas of a year ago when you were hustling and full of hope that in the New Year things would be far better…Then, finally bring us back to the present – where the story begins and ends. I think if you do that, the story would be more touching, nostalgic and better.
      I believe that writing at any point should be beyond competitions alone…Whatever it is, good work bro.

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    Sueddie Agema (@sueddie): Head Wordsmith - 47918 pts

    Bayo, this is a really lovely rendition. I don’t know whether this is true or not. One thing I know for sure is that it is totally believable and without pretence. This is a pure memoir without pretensions and I would not add a single thing or reduce one word from it if I was to be the teller too.

    Well done!

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    midas (@midas): Writer - 8173 pts

    This is a nice read. You are no doubt, a good writer. You penned this sincerely and matter-of-factly which is the only gaffe I observed with the piece.
    I must agree with @Scopeman on the part of introducing your frustrations which isn’t even the issue but the way it was presented. It was rather bland and journalistic to me.
    I understand the need for you to stay strictly within the confines of non-fiction, but you could have done better by infusing your predicaments with a little humour. Sometimes real life can be so drab and unartistic but it is the duty of a writer to embellish it with the beauty of language and make it artful.
    Anyways, I like the ending because of the feeling of joy and hope it engenders in that fleeting moment of celebration. Good one!

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    midas (@midas): Writer - 8173 pts

    N.B it is the matter-of -fact note in the piece that didn’t do it for me not the sincerity. It’s as sincere as sincere goes and I can relate with it

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    kaycee (@kaycee): Head Wordsmith - 150089 pts

    Wow!
    Another contender for the top.

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    Lawal Opeyemi Isaac (@easylife2): Scribe - 11119 pts

    @ Scopeman has expressed my thoughts directly, but there is no detracting that you write well.

    Well done!!!

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    Raymond (@raymond): Head Wordsmith - 47550 pts

    The last line is a winner.

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    Mazi Nwonwu (@Fredrick-chiagozie-Nwonwu): Scribe - 13492 pts

    This is a great story, very well written too. I don’t believe nostalgia is all about happy things jor and the fact that one is nostalgic about Christmas doesn’t mean he/she forget about the dark clouds. I like this story, I like how it was written and I an sure going to vote for it.

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    tamie (@tamie): Beginner - 640 pts

    I like this story and how it was written..it was sincere and i could connect to how the guy was feeling all through the story.

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    emilyonikaba (@shewhoisloved): Junior Writer - 3758 pts

    Well written.

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