Foxriver

Stuck in this prison.. I long for the time when I will be through with serving this sentence of mine.. 5years of imprisonment with hard labour, that was what the judge pronounced and then he had banged his gavel loudly like he wanted it to get into my bubbly brain immediately.. As if I didn’t already hear his hoarse voice the first time.. Stuffy old man thinks he is omnipotent.. Hmmmph!

Got thrown into this prison and it has not been so bad in here mostly because I have got my music, novels and life which though sometimes isn’t even worth the stress or the living but for God’s mercy(He does make life bearable in here).. And hey! I won’t forget this phone of mine that allows me browse and get to know what is going on in the world beyond this walls. Though I must tell you, If any of the guards(clad in blue or brown shirts on black trousers) catch me ehn! My own don finish.. Kabish!.. So if you catch a glimpse of them just whisper my name, make I hide am before ah no go see the kain phone again.. na ‘contraband’ for inside here na.. We are not allowed to use this kind of phones before we capture the deplorable state of things in here and the photographs make their way to the press..

Why am I here? you ask.. You don’t believe me culpable or capable of a Crime worth 5 years of my life.. That judge is wicked! You say to yourself..Not this girl.. Not when I look this Inno*saint* huh?..

Well the truth is I tried to kill this guy that had been disturbing me for a long long while.. (I actually did stick a knife in his stomach but he was stronger than I reckoned..)
You must have met him at one point in your life too and I was trying to help us all but look where it got me, serving the fourth year of my incarceration in this Gawdforsaken place. Will be out very soon God willing..

And all these are happening because I tried to KILL Mr Education..The stuffy old Judge had pronounced 5years imprisonment with hard labour for the attempted murder of Mr Education…

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MADweek

Monday morning;
girls go a’ jogging,
up and down,
breasts go a’ jiggling.
Tuesday morning;
boys go jogging,
up and down
with a frown.
Wednesday morning;
at seven o’clock,
there comes a’ shouting,
‘the lecturer is in class’.
Everyone goes a’ running,
to reach the class.
Wednesday evening,
at four o’clock;
hall-reps* come announcing,
leave your rooms
without delay
and go out to play,
for it is a rule.
Hostel doors clang shut with a lock.
Here comes thursday;
for most,the only normal day.
Go to class at eight,
and come back not so late..
Aha! Thank God its Friday!.
The end of weekdays,
The beginning of real flexing,
as Madcaf* knows real spending.
Saturday morning;
comes with a ringing,
can we meet at Madcaf,
the field or the cafe?
This day, secu’s* go a’ prowling
to make more money.
Ehn! Your phone is a Cam*.
Put some money in my palm.
O boy! Come here!
Are you meant to be there
after seven o’clock?
Then tugging you by the belt,
not listening to your ‘Oga cool it!!’
off you go ,straight to G-unit.
And then comes Sunday;
I must say a very Holy day.
No more cold baths
as we now begin at eight.
This very day,
you just have to pray.
Place the next week in His hands,
so He had lead you by the hand..
Oh! Here comes the week train,
jump in and start again…

Secu; short for security..

G-unit; Slang for a mini prison..

MadCaf; a fastfood of some sorts..

Cam; short for camera..

Hallreps; short for hall representatives..these are students who watch over others..



33 thoughts on “Foxriver” by Bubbllinna (@sibbylwhyte)

  1. Now the piece(Foxriver) is exactly what it is..A ramble..
    I wrote this with my school in mind..
    It is almost a prison..the only difference being in the fact that we actually enter the prison willingly all in a bid to get educated..

    And the poem(MADweek)..It would be very familiar to the students of the school…
    Twas written when I noticed school life was as boring and monotous as it could ever be.. And the activities mentioned were the same year in, year out..

    P.S; Written strictly for Fun…

  2. And I suspect I may be guilty of having broken some rules…(i hit the submit button instead of preview)
    I had like to be shown where I went wrong with regards to this post..Tankx

  3. I feel you jare, Omo Mad….o….. make I finish am? No be small thing. I related well with every aspect of your story and poem. Nna na wa o. Life 4 there neva change?!

  4. @Eletrika..Kai!..D lyf neva change I dey tell U..
    Abeg make we no finish am..lol
    U finishd frm dre?..
    Now I can sigh in relief..thought dis would neva be read by someone who knew and understood..
    U made me smile jor..tankx

  5. The Mr. Education thing just turned the tale on the head. Have to ask, Why not name the guy ‘Education’? Kinda reads better to me…
    For the first lines, (if I was the author) I would have had the first lines read as:
    ‘Stuck in this prison. I long for the time when I will be through with serving this sentence of mine – 5years of imprisonment with hard labour. That was what the judge pronounced. Then he banged his gavel loudly as if to hammer it into my bubbly brain immediately. As if I didn’t already hear his hoarse voice the first time.. Stuffy old man thinks he is omnipotent.. Mtscheeeeew!’
    I think some structuring would help too…but well, no be to ‘judge’ I come do joor…;)

    Hee hee hee…these posts… Reminded me of Covenant and Madonna in ways I can’t describe…The piece with the Judge …
    The poem ehn ‘MadWeek’ – na real madness…be like say na mad person write am ma! ;) It is sooo scattered, uncoordinated, disorderly, unwriterly, fit for the psychiatric inmates … kai… it is nonsense! And to me, that is the best part. Because all these are what madness should be about. Good one here, good one. Had a madly good read…small work and the madness would be perfect!

  6. @Sueddie…Gbam!!..U sabi!..why U think say ah name dis post Foxriver?.
    Dose skuls remind me of prison break jor..
    Shey U don use style call me mad pikin ba?.. No wahala..

    I used d Mr because I am a girl..So he should be male..nd seeing as i am put in prison on account of this..I thought it better 2 personify Education as a male…

    I was MAD as at d time I wrote the poem..Foxriver could do that to you..@eletrika knows this to be true…

    Any work wey dey dis piece, U go clean am up with me..Promise?..

    Oya where is that my book?.Lemme start ‘correcting d corrections’…tankx Su’

  7. Ehen?..Talk jor..

  8. hehehe! I’ve heard so many tales about this schools, which makes me think it’s one of the best correctional facilities I’ve seen… Shun me jor, you try. Just make s/th good out of the situation. And personifying education as male hmm…

  9. Whatever I say here might be something based on my personal thoughts and style of writing. I think though that the memoir might have benefited more from short crisp lines.
    ‘Got thrown into this prison and it has not been so bad in here mostly because I have got my music, novels and life which though sometimes isn’t even worth the stress or the living but for God’s mercy(He does make life bearable in here)’
    Okay, for listening pleasure, I like the way it flows. Really swell but for writing, hmm, maybe you should consider breaking it into pieces…using some comma or full stop (yeah, more like full stops) for effect. This would create better understanding. … For instance, do you think ‘Got thrown into this prison and it has not been so bad…’ works well…? I think a full stop should have come after ‘prison’ with ‘and’ deleted…Etc for the rest…

    I loved this line: Though I must tell you, If any of the guards(clad in blue or brown shirts on black trousers) catch me ehn! My own don finish.. Kabish! … Only wonder why you put their uniform colour. Maybe you could have used that for effect or something but I didn’t notice it. About the beauty of the sentence, it reminded me of Soyinka’s A Play of Giants where one of the main characters always ended his speeches with something like that… Same with Achebe’s Anthills of the Savannah…though I think that one was ‘Kabisa’ or so…

    If you need more info sha, meet me at our usual joint where we give flying… *wink

  10. hee hee hee, reading your comments above and had to laugh a bit. Na real Fox River…you see, it’s always good to have the inside story…;)

  11. @ablyguy…Just enrol..a trial would convince you…seriously..
    P.S; Education na guy jor..

  12. @Sueddie…*whispers*…It was so freaking short d 1st time, Thought Ns wouldn’t publish it..So I added jara…

    Am going back to d manuscript nd i’m puttin in dose punctuation marks..(seem 2 have a problem wt dose)..

    D colors were just 4 comic relief..U nidta see dem clothed thus nd being officious to appreciate it..

    Ehn! Sueddie?? no be me nd U o…We get joint but still we no dey give…u kno na…hehehe…

  13. Hehehehehehehehe

    I love the twist!

    In a hurry. Will give a comprehensive….later.

  14. @Seun..,waiting…impatiently patient

    1. Okay. Here we go.

      I like the poem…even up to the ‘unstructuring’ Su’eddie noticed. To me it speaks of a naive and innocent mind’s desire to escape from an imposed imprisonment…something less than desirous to the naturally rebellious mind of the prisoner.

      Touche.

      1. @seun…I loved the unstructured nature of the poem(i wonda how structured it could get)..
        It is exactly as it ought to be…plus it has got rhymes too!…
        No touchés please…I actually told someone my name was Rebel(and he believed!!)..Tankx 4 liking dis crazy piece..

  15. @sueddie, you too dey talk.
    @sybblinna, really nice craze you got here. You kinda over did it sha. Women tend to over do everything. Your craziness don pass guys own.

    I love the poem.

  16. @kaycee…Am rili glad U love d poem..
    About d ‘overdoing’…I wish I knew how I got this overdone o..Mayb I left it to cook for so long…
    Ah neva craze reach any of the guys(you included) wey dey here o…I am very normal jor

  17. @Kaycee, she didn’t overdo anything. She didn’t even do it up to the real level. It’s exactly the way it is there.

  18. Very amusing story/poem, @sibbylwhyte. I like the way you ‘metaphorised’ the school as a prison, although I don’t think that the crime of ‘killing Mr. Education’ worked well for me. Since you are in school to study or if you like, gain an education, I would have said that crime of abducting Education would work better.

    And don’t think that all this will end in secondary school… especially if you are unfortunate enough to get sent to universities like Covenant University. :)

  19. @Tola…You have a gud point o..But you see sometimes I actuali wish Education could get killed..So we all would run around in uneducated glee…hehehe…
    Secondary school was half a dozen light years ago..Itx jst a memory dis days..And d university cum prison?..I got locked up there too!!…
    I am sure you would understand my anger at Mr Education that wants him DEAD in this piece…

  20. Pele o, about the education thing.Abi you wan try ignorance……..lol.

    Don’t even know what to make of the writing.But you try sha.

    Well done!!!

  21. Nice concept, both poems.

    Better try ‘uncluttering’ or ‘unclustering’ your artistic mind.

    Now you have try romance next time. Try a Bridesmaid-like kinda chic lit. Waiting oh.

  22. @lawal…With d stress of gettin educated..being ignorant might be beta…hehehe..

    Sorry about your inability to make something out of the writing…people like @babyada get the writing, it’s written for the likes of us…

  23. Ist of all Jay..d 1st is NOT a poem o…more like a ramble…

    Pray do tell me..any ideas on how to unclutter dis mind of mine??…

  24. Ist of all Jay..d 1st is NOT a poem o…more like a ramble…

    Pray do tell me..any ideas on how to unclutter dis mind of mine??…Thanks 4 making ur presence read here..

  25. And 4 d bridesmaids tingy..I am on it..hehehe

  26. The school seems scary o.

  27. One gets used to it, snow…hehe.

  28. @sibbylwhyte
    loving your works more and more………..

  29. Wow……..nice one sis,though u got me wondering at first

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