Not my fault- An epistle of a mad man to his people

Not my fault- An epistle of a mad man to his people

Dear brethren,

I must write to tell you how am doing. It has been long since I left to this my unknown journey. You must have missed me alot, but I miss you all more. I still recall the lovely days we share together, laughing, eating and playing together. Everything was just normal not until the sickness came calling. My very being changed, I couldn’t help it as I always walk on the streets talking to myself or run when no one had the thought of chasing me.

What changed me was I could tell as you dreaded me like a contagious disease. Nobody wants to help or make me come back to my normal senses rather you all conspired to have me chained because you claimed am becoming a great nuisance in the society. For days, you left me hungry and thirsty under the mercies of blood sucking mosquitoes. I urinated and do the backyard business on my clothes. Come rain, come shine I was there hoping that one day I will be free and much better than I use to be.

The hope turned sour as you all conspired again, you went and brought the psycharitic officials to do God knows what to me. But I gave them the best beating of their lives as I fought like a wounded lion. I broke the chains with my bare hands while the tree that had been my companion was too sorry as I uprooted it. Talk about possession, I was more than possessed. Seven different spirits waiting to unleash their anger because they hate to be chained. I was a monster because I could see any of you as a human. I chopped ears, nose, fingers just name it. Mazi okeke must still be in great pain, my teeth and fingers never pitied him. My destruction was huge as everywhere seemed like a war ground. Battered and looted. Loses were much. Cries at every corner. It was a run for safety, staying back means you don’t love yourself. Nothing could stop me not even the police that was invited, but took to their heels as they shot at me, without the bullets doing anything to me. It was as if I was being watered.

I wasn’t the one doing those things, it was the spirits. They are unhappy. They want the streets. To see the outside world and feel its breeze. I couldn’t resist due their total hold on me. Am told what to be done and where to go. Sometimes it just seems fun all the way while other times I was too violent. Not my fault, that’s madness spirits.

Right now, I don’t even know where am going. They are the one leading the way. I pray and believe that one day they will lead me back into your arms. Until then, I still remain your brother and friend Nonso.



25 thoughts on “Not my fault- An epistle of a mad man to his people” by Uchechukwu Obiakor (@uchechukwu1)

  1. Nice and creative piece Uchechukwu, this should be titled ramblings of a mad man.lol

  2. Hehehehe. Nice. Some typos crept in towards the end though…

    1. @ray,got your correction, thanks

  3. Not so nice. Wouldn’t be nominated anywhere. Lots of mix up in tenses. Revamp.

  4. @ KAYCEE GIVE THE YOUNG MAN A BREAK… THERE IS A GOOD CONCEPT AND STYLE TO THE TALE… BESIDES HIM NOT BEEN ABLE TO CONTROL HIS STORY, THERE WAS SOMETHING THERE.

    1. casey, no doubt, the story was very creative and the style is ok but @kaycee had a good point about the mixed up tenses. and typos.

      a few of them:

      What changed me[ was I could tell as] you dreaded me like a contagious disease.[THERE IS AN ERROR IN THE PART I BRACKETED. SOMETHING IS MISSING]

      chopped ears, nose, fingers just name it.[DID THE MAD MAN WALK AROUND WITH A CUTLASS OF DID YOU MEAN HE BIT OFF THOSE BODY PART?]

      It was a run for safety, staying back means you don’t love yourself.[ NOTICE THE TENSE MIX UP was AND means ARE NOT USED CORRECTLY. THE means SHOULD HAVE BEEN meant TO MAINTAIN THE TENSE]

      I couldn’t help it as I always walk on the streets talking to myself or run when no one had the thought of chasing me. [couldnt AND always walked ARE NOT CLICKING FINE IN TERMS OF THE TENSE]
      THIS COULD HAVE BEEN: i couldn’t help it as i walked [on] the streets talking to myself and running when no was was chasing.

      ALL THE SAME, THE STORY IS QUITE GOOD.

  5. Nice concept…a breezy read though.

    1. @emmy,am glad you came,thank you

  6. thanks@anderson,maybe i will that tittle on it

  7. Uche…I really think you need to slow down and ask yourself ‘why do I write’?

    This is the second story I’m reading from you I think..and from the title, your creativity and talent is evident. But as I think i have pointed out before…talent is a dime a dozen. What sets you or anyone else apart from the pool is dedication to your craft…focus and determination.

    Nice concept…spoiled by the typos and some incomprehensible sentences. Take this for example;

    “What changed me was I could tell as you dreaded me like a contagious disease. ”

    I could make no sense of it. I couldn’t even correct it.

    Do be careful man! Take all the time you need in making your story the best possible. People will forget how long it took you to do the job, but will remember how well you did it.

    You’re really talented. Don’t hurt yourself or your talent with carelessness.

    Hope i have not hurt you unneccessarily. Most importantly, hope you have learned something.

    1. @seun,i feel appreciated.i’m learning,one day the best shall come

      1. Nothing but appreciation man…I’m glad you see it for what it is.

    2. @Seun has made very good points and i am glad you took them in good faith

      1. Thank you xikay…

        One day you’ll tell me what that name means…over drinks and …..

        1. no yawa. i’m up to the task

  8. in all, you have done a good job with this piece. personally, i think you are good. a second read is always very important before posting.

  9. Nice idea. Keep growing.

  10. Keep writing. I love the idea of the narrative. Just try reading your piece over for typos before submission.

  11. @ Uche, no vex jare, my first Post, JAMBITE was worse, I still dey learn too.

    1. what if i tell you that that first post JAMBITE is one of my best stuff, coming from you…

  12. I like the concept very much, Uchechukwu. And compared to your previous stories, I think this is an improvement, as far as typos and tenses go. Keep on working… your stories are good, just don’t let the telling be spoilt by poor execution.

  13. With all the comments already made by others, I have to say I really liked this piece, and more importantly is the way you take the criticisms that come your way. Keep writing.

  14. I like the idea of the story but please watch your typos and have others look over your work before you turn it in for publication. We are all here to learn ok.

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