Plot2. #Challenge me contest – The Dark Side Of The Sun

He held her hands tightly but gentle and smiled.
“Adanne we are not alone. Am not letting you go. I don’t care of the consequences. Our love is all we have and that is strong enough for me. But I can’t fight this alone. I need you. Are you with me?”
She looked up to his eyes filled with love and sincerity then smiled and nodded her head in agreement. They sealed their fate with a kiss. Unknown to them a stranger lurked in the bushes.
They were suddenly yanked away from each other’s embrace as an angry mob of villagers stared at them all ranting curses on them. They were led to a yard guarded by warriors. Inside the yard lived several of the chiefs’ wives and infants who immediately left on the arrival. Also in the yard muled chickens, goats, dogs and a short horned cow. They were forced on their knees as they stared at the head chief and 3 other chiefs. The curses outside did not surprise Adanne as much as the look in Jason’s eyes, his sky blue eyes with love was suddenly replaced with a fiery temper.
“Adanne! You know the customs of our people and yet got involved with the enemy.” One said.
“This people are involved in transporting our people overseas and in our community here it is a taboo to be associated with them or any of our kind involved in it.” Another pressed.
“And finally, you disgraced and insulted our customs and traditions and we frown on that. Do you have anything to say in your favor before we pass our final decision?” The last chief asked.
“Ndewo!” She greeted. “I know I am guilty for going against our traditions and customs and I also agree Jason’s people are responsible for selling our people which we consider to be a taboo. But he is not to blame for any of this. He is a good man, ezigbo nwoke and he loves me a lot. He doesn’t care about anything; love is all he has for me and he’s willing to be one of us.”
“Osiso!” the head chief finally spoke. “He is not like us and can never be like us. You shame us for speaking this way. You are considered shameful to our tribe and shall be killed on the second market day. Throw them in the cell.”

Adanne was awakened by the faint voice behind her.
“Am sorry Adanne but am here to make things right.” Her friend chineye explained her plan on how she would help them escape. As the head chief daughter she knew her way around the Slave Coast. She explained how the journey to her new world wouldn’t be easy.
Adanne held her hands with tears in her eyes and said. “Sometimes the right path is not the easiest one my dear friend.”
And then and there she knew what she was fighting for.

12 thoughts on “Plot2. #Challenge me contest – The Dark Side Of The Sun” by KellyShor (@Kellyshor)

  1. This went too fast. It is also unrealistic. One minute two people were kissing, the next minute the whole village was pulling them apart and raining curses. Haba! Were the whole villagers hiding and watching them or what?

    1. KellyShor (@Kellyshor)

      Some one was watching and from what have read you show and not tell the writers everything

  2. Nalongo (@Nalongo)

    Punctuation issues.

    1. KellyShor (@Kellyshor)

      Thank you…hope to do better

  3. Ufuoma Otebele (@ufuomaotebele)

    SO SO SO SO SO SO DIFFERENT! You caught my interest. I read this out loud to a friend and we both enjoyed it.

    “Adanne held her hands with tears in her eyes and said. “Sometimes the right path is not the easiest one my dear friend.”
    And then and there she knew what she was fighting for. ” This goes far beyond the issue of slave trade. Most often, the right path is the hardest but like you said, when you know what you are fighting for, your reason, your passion and purpose, then you have already won!

    1. KellyShor (@Kellyshor)

      @ufuomaotebele thank u for taking time to read it and am happy you enjoyed it also

  4. Ugochukwu (@Ugochuckwu)

    Well,when i aw Kelly Shore i was like “Finally!!!!”….about the story however, i think i agree with kaycee a bit on that “Lurking in the bush” part and all of a sudden, Jason isn’t heard of in the story anymore.
    And as Ufuoma said, you sure did take quite a different route at this one. Congratulations, hope to see you around here more often.

  5. KellyShor (@Kellyshor)

    @ugochuckwu thank u for taking the time to read it and i appreciate your observations. Everything went fast cos of the 500 wrds limit…you sure would cos ve written a few here recently lol hope u check them out

    1. Ugochukwu (@Ugochuckwu)

      I’m just gonna try finding them out…;-)

  6. Korayday (@DelectableKay)

    I hardly noticed the glitches pointed out by previous comments. I liked the unexpected turns in the story. Good stuff.

  7. Folakemi Emem-Akpan (@Folakemi)

    liked the story and the saying, “sometimes the right path is not the easiest path”. Pls be careful with punctuation. Looking forward to reading more of you. cheers

  8. KellyShor (@Kellyshor)

    @folakemi thank u. M glad u enjoyed it and as for punctuations m still working on it…thnk u

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