Letters By Funmi (#lbf) – Raped

I said No!
He heard Yes!
I meant Go
He ingressed

Now I’m in a state of denial-
Belial has plundered my estate, I’m pariah
The pains that I feel are like wires
Being drawn through my skin with a dagger

He didn’t come with the keys
He broke the door
I see blood on the sheets
‘feel weak and sore

Swept off my feet
By a king in my fantasy
Knocked off my feet
By a thief in reality

I feel the rage of the rain
Under the showers of my pain
Hot scalding droplets
I’m so crushed, I’m so worthless

Calm down Funmi, calm down
But how can I when I’ve been brought down
Slow down Funmi, slow down
Not ne-ce-ssary cos’ I’m on rundown

21 thoughts on “Letters By Funmi (#lbf) – Raped” by Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

  1. A beautiful rendition… your choice of words captivated me… your “bruised, broken and battered” resonated in my mind as I was reading…

    1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

      @innoalifa thanks for stopping by…glad you liked it

  2. Poignant poetry @dees-hive

    beautifully crafted; I love it…but what’s with the hash-tags? Was this meant for twitter or the social media? I just felt the hash-tags played down the power of those words “bruised, broken and battered”, made it feel like I was reading a tweet and not a poem.

    1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

      @Afronuts the purpose was actually to amplify the words. i was caught between the use of a dash as in -battered, (which is more technically correct by the way) or the use of the hash-tag which is more urban. i chose the later as the poem clearly shows…i think the results are mixed…as can be seen from @innoalifa comment and then yours. what would you have used to amplify and play up the power of those words if you were caught in such a strait…would like to know and learn.

      1. @dees-hive, I think the hash-tags can even be understood as the poet’s stylistics……………besides, @dees-hive is free to play in words the way he likes but fulfilling his poetic aim at the end………..

        1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

          @innoalifa we meet again…thanks for stopping by… your tots are appreciated.

          1. @dees-hive, and will be meeting more often………..love your poem really…….reciting it now………..

            1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

              @innoalifa i’m really honoured bro. def’ we will be meeting more often.

              1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

                merci beacoup.

                1. @dees-hive, hey! tu parles bien le francais…… on va barvarder……..

                  1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

                    i had to go translate this…sorry i dabbled into french…i’ll stick henceforth to the english that i know @innoalifa

                    1. @dees-hive, that beautiful………….

  3. Thaniels (@jayrume)

    “Swept off my feet
    By a king in my fantasy
    Knocked off my feet
    By a thief in reality

    men i love that rhyme…

    1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

      @jayrume thanks for dropping by…cool to see you enjoy poetry as much as you do prose….your tots are appreciated. Gracias

      1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

        @jayrume i’m sure you know, this piece was done by Funmi after Bode raped her….*see how one comment you made is making her letter trend again* Osheii

  4. Oloruntoba Yetunde (@Olushademi)

    soooo coooooool, but sad…nice one! Its will sound nice in a rap tone & tune

    1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

      @Olushademi the rapper… i feel you jare…yeah i agree its really sad…its from Funmi, the same one in the serial ‘The Morning After’…its a piece scripted after the incidence with Bode…

    2. Gene.O (@Ekenam)

      @Olushademi I know right?! My thoughts exactly.

  5. Gene.O (@Ekenam)

    Ah! I see someone beat me to commenting on how good it would be as rap material. Loved the flow, rhythm and the fact that it held on to its essence. Amazing working even tho the subject reflects Funmi’s painful ordeal.

    1. Dee's hive (@dees-hive)

      @Ekenam yh someone def’ beat you to it…thanks for stepping on the page…i appreciate it.

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