Musings on Time…

Musings on Time…

matter-of-time-bob-bennett

I.

When a broken heart writes,

It scribbles bloodless*…

 

The dark viscosity of suffering is its ink,

as It writes on the pages of shattered dreams…

 

Where the edge of loss is sharpest, serves for its pen –

and the fiery brightness of longing is its lamp…

 

…When a Broken heart writes

 

II.

(for)

When dreams die…

They do not fall off and shatter like knocked-off glass,

Instead –

They darken slowly and dry off like wilted flowers…

Then break off and drop gently, (soundless) to the floor

And only we, their owners, hear the deafening crash of that drop…

And only we, their owners, know a gap has opened on our stalks…

 

…when dreams die.

 

III.

 

For when this world drops its gauntlet at your feet,

And no one stands with you…

 

For when the lonely moments creep on,

Faith forgotten…Love denied –

And only fear comes about to grip your heart…

 

Then have Hope, Sister, have Hope…

Have Hope that this battle will not break your back,

Have Hope that defeat will not have the day…

 

Go to the thin, drying stream of Hope,

Kneel by it and Cry, if you must…

 

Let your tears raise its squalid volume,

Let the Waters of Hope rise and drown you in its tide…

 

When the blows from life lands…

And your skin tears off in bloody stripes…

As strength vaporizes from your beaten husk…

You still will look up…

Down for now, but all In…

And you will Know, doubtless, that this world will never break your back!

 

Note:

*Bloodless in this context is an euphemism for both “devoid of emotion” and “Lacking in vigor/ zest i.e lackluster.”



18 thoughts on “Musings on Time…” by ayomitans (@ayomitans)

  1. Wow! The way people jump and pass Good stuff on NS amaze me.

    Ayo, there’s nothing less than WOW in my head for these poems. They are simply amazing!

    I will have to come back again and again to read. @chemokopi. Do read this when you get in here, you might like it.

    I think the ellipses are in excess, but that doesn’t take a dot away from this.
    Well written, well done. $ß.

    1. @sibbylwhyte…haha…you don’t fail to wow me…thanks for the praise

  2. Nice expressions and message.
    This is very nice.

    1. @chimzorom…I am appreciative of the appreciation you bestow on this poem. Thank you so very much…

  3. @ayomitans, waoh, good poem you have here. You nailed it. I miss your short stories, hope you are working on one. Welldone.

    1. @olajumoke, you are far too kind, so very kind. I am glad you find this piece worth your time and your praise. i too have to say that your Our angels series is really giving @mimiadebayo a run for her “money” on the chick-lit/romance front…you are a good writer…well done

      1. @ayomitans, I am glad people are reading the series and showing their support. I am grateful. But I still have a lot to learn. Especially from @mimiadebayo who has plenty of ‘chick-lit tricks’ under her sleeves. I can only sniff the palace as a loyal subject of the Queen at the moment.
        Please keep reading Our Angels dear sir. Thank you.

  4. Love the first two parts. The ‘Hope’ part is great though, but I would have preferred the poem to end on a ‘sad’ or should i say on a ‘broken heart’ note. That, in my unsolicited opinion, would make the poem live in the heart of the reader for a long time.*just saying*

    1. @ibagere…i always love having your opinions, they are totally well-thought about. I see your point and i agree, it could be better. Thanks for your always coming around and encouraging one. Your honesty is refreshing

  5. Very Captivating.Definately worth d read

    1. @jade69…i’m real glad you think it’s worth it. Thank you for your kind endorsement

  6. brilliant! i love the first two parts the most. i seem to not get the need for the word put in parentheses.

    the third part wasnt as tight as the first two because of the sentence construction. starting the lines with “for” left the whole part hanging. using ”for” means that as a result of this, this will happen. e.g for God so loved the world, THAT…. because of his love, he did something” ”for this purpose was i created”

    so that 3rd part should have started with ”when”. when this happens, then do this. read it again

    WHEN this world drops its gauntlet at your feet,

    And no one stands with you…

    WHEN the lonely moments creep on,

    Faith forgotten…Love denied –

    And only fear comes about to grip your heart…

    THEN have Hope, Sister, have Hope…

    Have Hope that this battle will not break your back,

    Have Hope that defeat will not have the day…

    GO to the thin, drying stream of Hope,

    Kneel by it and Cry, if you must…

    Let your tears raise its squalid volume,

    Let the Waters of Hope rise and drown you in its tide…

    WHEN the blows from life lands…

    And your skin tears off in bloody stripes…

    As strength vaporizes from your beaten husk…

    You still will look up…

    Down for now, but all In…

    And you will Know, doubtless, that this world will never break your back!

    well done! i salute

    1. oga mi at the top @topazo….you don make the poem far better than he be before o….as a result, i forfeit d authorship, copyright etc to you, gbam!!

      Thanks a lot for this…wow, i always want this tips on how to get better and i am glad you are a reliable source of that. Thamks again!

      1. lol @ayomitans… such an honour is too great for me to take. to you belong the credit for the time and energy and the brain work ad creativity that went into the poem….

  7. So… am not an expert on poems but permit me 2 say that this is a very nice one. I like the way u wove d words smoothly. I must say you’re quite a good writer.

    As for @olajumoke‘s naughty ‘allegation ‘ about me being madame of chick-lit ,I choose 2 reserve my comments. Hehehehe. According to
    @chemokopi there’s no end to learning. So I’m still learning and aiming to get much better.
    However, Thank you Jumoke, am flattered.

  8. Great piece, you wouldn’t have been closer to the truth… keep it up!

  9. 1. @sibbylwhyte touched on the ellipsis. Hmmm, she got here before me. Ok, I was wondering if they were there to add meanings to the art. A full stop would’ve the same homage as what I read here.
    2. The poem started far too “un-africannly” expository to me. The “when…when…when.” Well, I later got to see the virtue you glassed up in them. Good thing you later showed that the persona is addressing a ‘daffodil’. That gives the poem a one level up. Now you did have an introduction, a body and a conclusion.
    To sum, this is a good art. I love the pictures you succesfully painted. I missed the emotion though. I didn’t really feel that “touched”, but..does it matter? Well done.

  10. I’m speechless…………

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