Heart broken

My First Lady

THERE WAS THIS LADY

THOUGH I HEARD SHE WAS HEADY

YET I ASKED HER TO BE MY LADY

 

I THOUGHT OF HER DAILY

EVEN THOUGH SHE MADE ME WEARY

FOR HER SAKE I ACTED STUPID

BECAUSE SHE ACCEPTED TO BE MY LADY

 

I STOOD TALL

ABOVE THOSE WHO THOUGHT ME SMALL

EVERYDAY I WOULD CALL

CAUSE HER VOICE WAS NEVER DULL

FOR SHE IS MY LADY

 

SHE WAS MY FIRST

EVEN THOUGH I HAD FOUR NEXT

SHE WAS STILL THE BEST

PLEASE COME BACK TO MY NEST

AND BE MY LADY.

 

IF ONLY WE NEVER PARTED

I WOULD BE THE ONE YOU ALWAYS THOUGHT OF

COME BACK TO ME

AND I WILL NOT ONLY MAKE YOU MY FIRST LADY

BUT MY ONLY LADY



7 thoughts on “My First Lady” by bishop (@bishopandy)

  1. Love and dejavu

    1. bishop (@bishopandy)

      @izuone this is my dejavu whats yours

  2. Nice rhymes…

    But I think you were not consistent with your tenses: in the third verse, the first three lines were past tense and then you introduced a present tense “she is my lady” think it should be “she was my lady”

    The 4th and 5th verse, you switched from the 3rd person, to the 2nd person.
    E. G
    she was my first
    Even though I have four next
    She was the best
    I want her in my nest
    And to be my lady again

    5th verse
    If only we never parted
    I would be the only one she thought of
    If only she would come back to me
    I will not only make her my first lady
    But my only lady.

    These are just rough ideas, I’m sure you can write them better.

    Well done

  3. Hehe…love nwantintin.

    Nice.

  4. Why is everything in capital letters? Not cool.
    Hope she comes back to your nest soon.
    Well done. Keep writing. $ß

  5. @sibbylwhyte, i wish so too………., @topazo thanks for your corrections. will put them into consideration

  6. Fadehan Adeoshun (@Fadehan)

    i am tired of poem on here….

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