Fatherland

We are alike yet different
Diverse but with one intent
One purpose, one goal
One breath, one soul

Like scattered splinters
Of shattered glass
Like diffused rays
From a single beam

Our tribes, our tongues
Our legends, our myths
Our tales, our songs
Our religions and beliefs

Our tastes, our fashions
Our cultures and traditions
Our loves, our passions
Different people, one nation

Yet in our uniqueness
Lies our unity
Our togetherness
Despite diversity

Yes, we may differ
In brotherhood
Yet we stand
And believe still

In Fatherland
That unites us
In the common beauty
Of being NIGERIAN

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30 thoughts on “Fatherland” by igbor clemency (@clemency)

  1. “Diverse but with one intent
    One purpose, one goal
    One breath, one soul”

    One goal?! One purpose?

    I disagree with the above lines – for the most of it. We don’t share breaths – at least I know I don’t wanna share breaths with the people I meet at the bus-stop. Do you have any idea how many people have incredibly revolting mouth odor?!?

    Maybe mesef get….I’m just saying.

    It’s okay. Just a basic poem. Try harder. Give your readers reason to keep coming back to your pieces.

    My 50kobo.

    1. lolz……………………..that’s funny@seun that’s not the ‘breath’ am referring to, I too would love to keep my breath-good or bad-to myself. point taken sir, I too agree it’s just a basic simple poem, not up to the caliber my readers should expect from me, but am pleased you find it okay

  2. I like this poem. Very much.

    I have problems with these lines:
    Like scattered splinters
    Of shattered glass

    On closer examination, the above lines seem to express the reverse of what you want to convey. Shattered glass is most times useless. It connotes weakness and destruction, and when you walk on them, they cause you pain. And this is not what your poem wants to convey.

    The imagery here is fantastic:
    Like diffused rays
    From a single beam

    I like this because just like white light, we can colour the world with our differences when we pass our unity and common identity through the prism of the media, tourism, fashion etc just as your succeeding lines which I love so much, show us:

    Our tribes, our tongues
    Our legends, our myths
    Our tales, our songs
    Our religions and beliefs

    Our tastes, our fashions
    Our cultures and traditions
    Our loves, our passions
    Different people, one nation.

    I like the above lines because you have highlighted all the features that can contribute positively to our greatness as a nation.

    Well done clemency. Keep improving your art. There is no end to learning.

    1. @chemokopi i am greatly honoured that you like this piece. my use of the shattered glass imagery actually serves a purpose which is to further amplify our similarities in diversity. just as the scattered pieces are one glass, yet different pieces. am glad u find my work appealing despite its simplicity. i agree with you, there is no end to learning, thank you

  3. Not bad @Clemency

    Quick suggestion, you can replace
    “Like scattered splinters
    Of shattered glass” with

    “Like divers players
    In a football team”

    what do you think?

    1. good suggestion @ayistar, i’d look to it

  4. We are not the same. We cant have same goals.
    Well written.

  5. @kaycee we are not the same, my point exactly but we have the same goal as a nation.

  6. I’ll say this piece of yours is more about WHAT WE WANT than WHAT WE ARE at the present time. Believe me, you don’t need microscopes to see that!

    1. @supremo, dont really get what you mean but thanks all the same.

      1. Most of the good qualities you stated are not really present in Nigeria at the moment.

        1. @supremo, they’d be soon, just believe in Fatherland, happy 53rd independence day.

  7. I don’t know much about poetry but i think this is good

  8. @ifiokobong , thanks for stopping by to read and appreciate my work. Poetry is a beautiful art, try exploring more of it. you can visit my blog above, thank you.

  9. Jo (@josephoguche)

    Nice poem in honor of naija our fatherland …

    1. @josephoguche yes bro, fatherland forever.

      1. Jo (@josephoguche)

        Yes oo .. Carry go @clemency

              1. Jo (@josephoguche)

                Na so na, if I no catch am e go hit another person:) @clemency

                  1. Jo (@josephoguche)

                    Hahaha .. you are free to LOL but dont hit your head on the wall pls ok .. @clemency

  10. Nice poem, I must say @clemency

    “We are alike yet different
    Diverse but with one intent
    One purpose, one goal
    One breath, one soul”

    A fine picture of what Nigeria could have been, albeit the reverse is the case as of now.

    Yet in our uniqueness
    Lies our unity
    Our togetherness
    Despite diversity

    Yes, we may differ
    In brotherhood
    Yet we stand
    And believe still

    The above lines bleeds the persona’s or poet’s passionate desire to have a great and united country. We all should hope and pray it turns out so.
    The poem lives the reader with a lot of hope, unlike this here: http://www.naijastories.com/2013/08/who-cares-2/

    1. @idiong_divine thanks for your deep commentary of this piece,

  11. This is what happens when you are late!
    What more can I comment? It seems all the above commenters have said my mind, one after the other.

    Let me just use this one word: Encompassing!

    1. @chime221 Better late than never… Thanks for pulling this out from the dusty archives. One phrase… Merci boucoup

  12. Nice! I like this. More please.

  13. Gracias @nicolebassey. There’s definitely more ma’am, on my author page and my blog, do help yourself to whatever dish you like, there’s poetry and there’s prose… *in a chef’s voice

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