Drunken Stupor

Drunken Stupor

Drunken Stupor

Whinge
Whine
Stumble
I’m
Blind
Drunk
On
Cheap
Wine
Without
A
Kobo
A
Foolish
Soldier
Saw
Me
And
Flogged
Me
With
Koboko
Yéépá!
The
bloody
soldier’s
Koboko
tore
through
my
Sokoto
My
Body
Is
Now
Full
Of
Koboko
I’m
Pulling
On
My
Torn
Sokoto
My
Wife
Saw
Me
She
Laughed
Knowing
I
was
Stone
Broke
She
Left
Me
For
Sokoto!
Woe
is
me
I
Just
spent
Our
Last
Money
On
Drink
And
Lotto!



27 thoughts on “Drunken Stupor” by aturmercy (@aturmercy)

  1. RIO (@riowrites)

    Funny little poem. I like it. Keep writing.

    1. Thanks. Glad you like it.

  2. Chemo (@chemokopi)

    Beautiful!

  3. Funny ‘little’ poem indeed. But it’s structure may not fly…Anyway’s shey creativity is the in thing?…Well done…$ß

    1. Thanks Bubbly.

      The structure, I copied from the works of Shel Silverstein, an accomplished poet that writes a lot of humorous poetry. It was while I was reading some of his work that I was inspired to write this piece and three others.

      As for Shai’s creativity…I knew how to present my work but didn’t know how to put them up on NS the way I intended.

      His work “On The Road” made me aware that it is possible to use other formats on NS.

  4. Simple and cool.

  5. Apart from the fact that I liked it big time, what style is that?!

    1. @elovepoetry the style is called ABC Poem. Although the whole idea is to write one word per line you or a sentence, but you are meant to start with one alphabet and move on to the next in order. You can go backwards or forward. eg. ABC or CBA

      Almost
      Becoming
      Content

      or

      Confused
      But and not
      Amused

      Some poets like Shel Silverstein use this format but they don’t follow the alphabet rule. The just write one word per line like I have copied in this poem.

      I hope this helps.

      Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. It’s an honour that you like what you’ve read.

  6. Nice style. U gat me…

  7. The style is cool…i am still laughing sef

    1. I’m glad you like it and it made you laugh…thank you

  8. Hehehe… iLike…

    1. Your laughter is my reward. Thank you.

  9. Terrible on the eyes

    1. eiyaa! Sorry naw, wetin you wan make I do? Just trying to be creative.

  10. Nice one @urmercy…like counting sheep,you go on and on and on….lol

    1. Thanks Dotta. Glad u like.

  11. victoria (@victoria)

    Creativity n style, 9ce. Though i wud ve loved to c it in pidgin

    1. Thanks Victoria, Glad u like it. I hope it made u laff.

  12. This your style eh?

    I love the poem jare. Sorry o.

    1. Lol. Thanks

  13. Hilarious! I like the creative one word per line structure. Feels like a drunken stupor. Well done!

    1. Thanks Gboyega

  14. @aturmercy I love the style-structure…

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