Repression

Repression

Am siting and watching life pass by…
the sun is gone, dead-blue is d sky…
the moon is early-up..
its blurred by cloud’s fog,..

so far away, yet so near…
its lonely just as i am, down here…
i see the clouds cover it, its brightness almost dimming…
same time i feel dis malaise and its skimmings….

my heart is heavy, also it wanes..
i tell not d difference there-in-d aches and pains…
i feel feverish, my heart longs to attack..
i feel weak like I’ve bin hit by a mack….

my skin is gooze-pimpled…its not itself…
it crawls like i was in d presence of lucifer himself…
my stomachs empty, it longs to be filled..
the-what-to-eat-tonight-task is so uphill…

This biznes of living to me is without clarity..
how do we wade through its sea, and still maintain sanity…
The night’s breeze is cold, or is it me?
Oh God i hope i’m not going to be sick….

As the night draws near, am scared as shit…
why?i know that i will not get to sleep…
not with this depression, not wit dis malaisic-emotiöns…
not with dis thoughts & pondering dragging me to the floor of its ocean….



20 thoughts on “Repression” by Blaise Aphascea (@aphascea)

  1. Very depressing. Nice poem.

    1. I don’t see it as depressing sir, I think the character just exudes fear and lacks willpower.

  2. Hmmm, a lot of fear and emotion in this nice poem,the character threatens to rise but is held back by fear and all that
    These are my fav lines
    This biznes of living to me is without clarity..
    howdo we wade through its sea, and still
    maintain sanity…
    Good one

  3. True, the character lacks will power..there seem to be some sublimminal force causing that…that force keeps calling, like a die hard caller, whi stays n stays without going….depessing the character, then re-depressing it ..on n on.. Equating .REPRESSIONS…

    1. I think that’s where the beauty of the poem lies

  4. Lovely poem.Was nearly depressed reading it…..lol.

    Well done!!!

    1. Hahaha, very funny, I can imagine depression setting in over a simple read.

  5. There are just too many spoilers that you to rid this poem of for it to read well. Why these sms letters: ‘d’ and ‘bizness’? You even made mention of ‘am’ in your last stanza instead of ‘I’m’ or ‘I am’. The ellipses too, I want to know why they are all over the poem. I observe that they do not add anything, they only make the poem messed up. And you said ‘…..I’ve bin hit by a mack….’ what do you mean by the word ‘mack’? Also, how does been hit by a ‘mack’ make you ‘weak’? Go for another word, please. Again, why ‘bin’ instead of ‘been’. Be formal and write your words in full. This isn’t ‘Texting’, it’s POETRY.

    I believe you have a message, just pass it in a simple style. Simplicity could be creative too. Try it.

  6. @Joebwoi, marvelous, marvelous, your advice and corrections are quite delectable. Truly spoken, lolz…yes poetry..yes ofcourse, but then, I blieve poetry n writing has rules…..I’m just tryn to break a few….#it wouldn’t hurt to try would it? #just kiddin…I’ll heed wht u speak….those small words are like sleep wich manages to elude me most hours of d nyt..
    NB: Mack, I meant “Mack Truck”; pfcourse if u get hit by a mack, it means ultimate death..pls do not try @home, #sowy I meant on the #road. #wink

    1. i really enjoyed the poem. however, in your bid to ‘break a few rules’, you became too casual and that reduced the taste of the poem. all the same, it is quite a well written poem. well done

  7. Nice. Watch the typos.

  8. As the night draws near, am scared as shit…

    Strong word usage… good one

  9. I ditto Paul;’s first observation. I see the fear but i do not feel it. Therefore, it’s a creative endevour but not a emotive one. Hope you understand that.

    Nice.

    My fav part “the-what-to-eat-tonight-task is so uphill…”

    Nice.

    1. looks like someone like too much food *wink*

  10. @Seun, sure I understand that….and I also understand dt ur heart does not feel d fear in this write,but I aslo understand we all have diifrent hearts…tnx,gr8ly

  11. The message I get is that life could be a bumpy ride sometimes….even the early moon was not having it easy herself. I like the poem and agree with the observations above. Keep it up.

  12. @irene…yep…tis guud u draw a similarity btw d writer…and the moon, yep..they both were in d same predicament..tanx 4boserving….

  13. @xikay, see your mouth! U no like food?hahahahha me like food oh..anytin wey u like mke u talk….hahaha lolz….DDDD…

  14. All had been said,very nice one,just the typos…

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