Oh what an open world
Mothers caressing their children
Fathers fleeing
Leaving moms and kids to fend for themselves
Complicating lives; leaving homes abandoned and desolate
Oh what an open world
Government developing into bottlenecks
The populace crying to no avail
Oh what an open world
This world; an open world
Men and women; young and old
Do what they feel at will
Hustle and bustle of life
What an open world
Small and big
Thin and fat
Tall and short
Of different likes and dislikes
Oh! what an open world
Moves from one metropolis to another
Oh what a an open world…
Em…okay. Felt like the poem was not as deep as the title suggested…but that’s how it felt to me. The first and last verses were my favorite.
Good.
nice poem but it felt kinda shallow for me. you started greatly and your second to the last stanza was good too but you need to up your game. i can see that you are growing though.
nice one bro,but i ditto@seun,@xikay
I ditto d dittos…
I ditto the dittos d dittos. Nice one though.
Hehehehe….
@Raymond and Igwe, lol…
To the honest, I also think the poem fizzled out from a promising beginning.
U don see am naa, @Myne.
Is the poem for junior waec? Whiz da poet! Big name…..
Lol.
@ KayCee…Aba! Is that a charge or something.
Anyway, I just felt like writing something as simple as possible compared to my other poems with ‘too deep meaning’ as some complained like Seun and others.
For instance ‘The Giant’s Wrath’…that took many to unravel….
So Its not for any ….exam as you ‘mock’.
u can vex sha.
oh what an open world
a world of complexities
represented by two opposing
yet true realities
the good and the bad
the fat and the thin
the opulent and the poor…
a good poem Whiz da Poet…