Can We…?

Can We…?

CAN WE

Let’s assume I’m just wondering; thinking out loud,
I can hear you singing and I’m loving the sound
It’s easy to get carried away by your love but I must;
Share these thoughts with you so we can build a trust

Can We Cheat…?
The cyclic thinking about relationships?
How it must always pan out the way of the critics?
How it’s impossible for one not to be selfish?
And I wonder which of us; me or you is equipped to sell fish?

Can We Lie…?
Together in bed and just chill? While I…
Penetrate your mind with fingers steeped in wisdom
Lubricated with juices scooped from scrolls and books,
Creating landscapes and skylines with bible-based kingdoms?
And yeah; I’m raving ‘cos I’m suffering from an intellectual hard-on

Can We Steal…?
Away from negative ‘friends’ and fools?
Who think all we need to work are their opinions?
Thoughts like ‘She’s moving too fast’ ‘He’s cheating on you’
Ha. Why are they still single if they graduated relationship school?

Can We Kill…?
All negative concepts, thoughts and contracts?
Like how we must be shagging for this to really last?
Or like…how I must hold back how I feel for you?
Or like…how you should be ashamed of being true?
Or like…how I must act like I like your dad?

Can We Do…?
What we really need to…?
Like let you know just how much I really want you?
What we need to; really work for us to work, and not hesitate?
Like understanding; marriage is a journey and wedding’s just the toll-gate?

Can I put you on my shoulders; make you see farther for us?
Can you ignore the guys in the fly cars and join me gladly on the bus?
Can we change our vocabulary; create a great future with speech?
Can we stop ‘I’ ‘your’ ‘my’ ‘mine’ ‘me’ and think in terms of we?

Can We Just…Be?!



27 thoughts on “Can We…?” by Seun-Odukoya (@Seun-Odukoya)

  1. nice!!!! I love the title and the idea behind it.

  2. “Can We Lie…?
    Together in bed and just chill?
    While I… Penetrate your mind with fingers steeped in wisdom
    Lubricated with juices scooped from scrolls and books,
    Creating landscapes and skylines with bible-based kingdoms?
    And yeah; I’m raving ‘cos I’m suffering from an intellectual hard-on”
    I loooove the play on words!

  3. Wowwwww,Seun this was simply amazing,I love it sooooo much.should show it to my BF,lolz
    May ur ink never go dry.

  4. Thank you guys…Adeyinka…Aunty Lade…thank you…bless God…

    Gretel…go ahead…lol…hope he likes!

  5. Gosh! Seun this is so enlightening to say the least.I know it’s your musing, but it is good food for thought…also love the play of words in the lines Lade pointed out, conjured up two distinct images as I read it..lol. Well done!!

    1. Thank you Mercy…bless God…!

      Images…??? What type of images (holds head in confusion)?????

      LWKMD!!!

      1. Not to be shared on NS..lol

  6. lovely poem Seun
    i love that line that began with
    Can we lie?
    very good.

  7. Thank you Ander…bless God

    1. you are welcome

  8. My favourite lines:

    “Can We Lie…?
    Together in bed and just chill?”

    This sounds like it could be a rap song. I like. The message is deep, very vivid.

    Seun, you know every.

  9. Na only God know every o, Uche dearie…but i understand your meaning and thank you for your kind words. Bless God.

    Good morning. How are you?

    1. I’m good o, Seun? But it’s funny sha, we’re in the same city (shebi), yet…

      (to be continued – Inbox)

  10. Meena-Adekoya (@Olajumoke-Adekoya)

    Thoughts like ‘She’s moving too fast’ ‘He’s cheating on you’
    Ha. Why are they still single if they graduated relationship school?
    love this line…so so true…very well delivered i must say…very nice

  11. Thank you Meena!!! Bless God..!

  12. Seun, beautiful as usual.
    This is truly beautiful; every word and line worked for me.

  13. JaysPLANET (@JaysPLANET)

    Hmmmmmm…This poem got me.Great job!!!

  14. So many well-delivered lines Seun- can’t copy and paste them all. so nice dude- so very nice.

  15. Still thinking….Still blinking….Hey…where did that all come from….Nice way to go…like the title and all…A lovely delivery…

  16. Thanks people!!! Bless God…

    Wow…you guys make me feel…

    Well…

  17. “Can We Lie…?
    Together in bed and just chill?
    While I… Penetrate your mind with fingers steeped in wisdom
    Lubricated with juices scooped from scrolls and books,
    Creating landscapes and skylines with bible-based kingdoms?
    And yeah; I’m raving ‘cos I’m suffering from an intellectual hard-on”
    I loooove the play on words! “Seun this is pure pun like i’ve not seen in years.Good use of words

  18. Ahh… This guy you be father! Too cool… Ah no no no. I’m gushing here. I nearly missed this o. Imagine. And the “can we lie…” verse was killer. Also the last verse was pretty good too. And you like to end your poetry in rhyme, no?

  19. Wow…I think of this piece as ‘intercourse with literary art’. While other people might interprete it as a poem about a love affair between two lovers, I see it as a love affair between a writer and his art:

    The first stanza seems to explore your excitement over a received inspiration.

    The second stanza seems to talk about bypassing critics via the exploitation of creative license.

    The third stanza is my favorite which explores the depth of the writer’s love with his art.

    The fourth stanza talks about totally ignoring the remarks of critics and sticking to doing your own thing.

    The fifth stanza examines the idea of going against the norms; an avant garde approach.

    The sixth stanza heralds the writer’s affirmation of commitment to his art.

    The seventh and the last stanza envisions the future the writer and his art have together away from the maddening crowd!

    Nice poetry seun!

    1. YOU PEOPLE ARE WOWOWOWOWOWOW!!!!!!!!!! BLESS GOD!!!!!!

      AFRO…I THINK WE NEED TO TALK SO MORE…YOUR ANALYSIS IS ON POINT!!!!! THANKS!!!!

  20. Grego….thank you…punning..!

    Sicko…yeah…i love the rhyme thingy…!

    Thanks again…bless God!

  21. Intelligence shines through this stuff! It makes a very interesting read too, with delicious rhymes.

  22. what brilliance

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