‎​ℓ☺​ℓ, thankee, sir! It’s just about a man dealing with his wife’s infidelity and treachery by building his script around his pain; in the last paragraph he is obviously contemplating murder; I hope it makes […]

Thanks bro! I’m concerned the story isn’t forthright with its message… perhaps tweaking certain elements will do

lol, thanks! Hope you find time to read and critique.

Thank you!

Thank you!

Thanks, SB. Recall it’s the two killers that time-travelled? One of them had that experience.

Nice one! I like the redemptive retribution visited on him.
Although, I personally felt the lengths he went to sustain his escapades – like keep an old car – was a bit stretched.
This also visits the lawlessness […]

Thank you!

Thank you! @ibagere… Ironically, I haven’t made any entry under the poetry category.

The note at the end further tells me you’re not the original author of this tale – totally off point. ‎​ℓ☺​ℓ! @ogaoga, pls subtract 100 pts

Thanks bruv! ‎​ℓ☺​ℓ! Beans & yam porridge? Not really – especially at the point of this entry
I just think it’s a solid Nigerian staple
Thanks again!

Lovely! I see we’ve got arguably the winner here. *except Kiah made an entry, ‎​ℓ☺​ℓ!*
He’d seem a moron when friends inquire after his babe & he blinks in confusion. I wish this could be extended. Great work!

Lovely!

Nice one

Lovely!

‎​ℓ☺​ℓ! @ Boska… Sounds like a bad thing
Was particularly inspired by Wole Soyinka’s The Interpreters, pursuing that kind of depth & liberal expression.
This is the penultimate of a conceptual bunch of […]

‎​ℓ☺​ℓ, I get the ‘tap’ part now… I thought it referred to the ‘tapping on the back’ of the child not working… I also get the ‘incoherent’ part too. True, it’s kinda wordy.

@topazo… Thank you; I guess I don’t have a sense of spacing yet, ‎​ℓ☺​ℓ. Too many words? Okay.
Thank you!

Effortless mastery shines through! The clinical, impersonal or detached feel does well to project the tragic breakdown of things.

I noted some things that seem to be errors:
I feel ‘the taps are not working’ […]

@TolaO… Wow, your words are a real booster! I’m so glad you ‘got me’, really am… Thank you! I outrightly see what you mean by the war of tense action & thotful drama & u’re dead on about the conflict. I […]

@TolaO… Wow, your words are a real booster! I’m so glad you ‘got me’, really am… Thank you!

‎​ℓ☺​ℓ! Thankee plenty!

Really amusing, I like this story… Though, I feel the part about the (doctor’s?) analysis of the dead man’s features to reach his conclusions was far from plausible. Then how the man finds out about his wife’s treachery?

INFP wri’er, you!
I could just go with the ‘feel good’ vibes this gives but the tense mixup is so much sand in my garri, ‎​ℓ☺​ℓ!
I think the 2nd installation’s still the best but there are tidbits here too

A-rated stuff! Am impressed! Well done, bruv

Okay, if you’re sure of the research then fine.