The ending murdered me.
I loved, loved, loved the repetitive “I just met her.” Simplicity at its best.

The rendition is what I loved most.

Oh myy!! It read like you had a writing marathon where you wrote for 5 minutes, stopped, and picked up the race again. I loved, loved, loved, the pictures you added. It flowed well like a beautiful piece of […]

I’m clapping for you the author of this great poem, for the authority, passion, truthfulness and motivation spilling from each stanzas. I am truly happy.

The title is extremely lazy for a piece like what you have here.
After the first paragraph my reaction was “ghen, ghen.” This story was hot, sexy, and everything else in between and I enjoyed it fully!

The […]

Title gave it all away. TOO bare. I did love the poem. LOVED the message.

Yasssss! This is such a “fancy” poem in its story and way it was written. Different. And good.

Typos and mispelled words and spacing issues. However, your title was brilliant. I enjoyed this.

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAHHHHHH!

Ada, let me be one with the mind that wrote this piece.

Funmi, if only you knew how much I love, adore this poem

IF ONLY..

The end scared the shit out of me
for a sec i thought this wasn’t fiction

what a sad ending to something so beautiful

Abi, I’ve read this story so many times and never once caught that typo . At times, I wish humans were gifted with better eye sight. Thank you for pointing that out.

I agree, it does take a strong woman to set a different path for herself. The sad part is that there are not enough of these “strong women.” But we’ll get there.

Sima, this is the only work by you that I’ve read and wow! You gave nothing away free without a charge, the price of carefully thinking about those 2 ending lines to each stanzas. You’re really good with word play Sima.

Yesssssssssssss! Something as simply as this but yet so delicious! I think you picked your words carefully and when to have the characters say them. This piece is barely 250 words long but it’s really beautiful. […]

The piece read like something someone who is new to writing poetry would write because the lines are so generic. Hmm.