Quite well written, @the-zenith, but not much happened here. In fact, to me, some of the writing felt like padding (like the dialogue where Carrie gets tea, gets Mr. Francis, etc. – this could just have been […]
@The-zenith, I like part 3.The pace is nice and the characters are starting to develop. There is a slight problem.There are no big buildings around the Louvre as it is an old part of the city. Any building from […]
@The-zenith, the story is promising but you need to show more and tell less. I assume you have never been to Paris by the number of times you say “beautiful” instead of describing. I was born there.If you need […]
@the-zenith the guy does not think like a teenager, a teenager would pass out literally if he had to undergo what Akin saw. Have you been following his odyssey, does his decision making seem jejune to you?
@the-zenith, I won’t repeat what has been already said by @topazo and @seun-odukoya. The story sounds like an interesting one… perhaps if we heard more of what Xavier was thinking as he was in the plane… his […]
@Olaedo. Yep.Finally! Thanks for reading and commenting,dear! @The-zenith.Thanks for reading and commenting,dear! @Zikora. I’m so glad you like Jake.I was beginning to think no one liked him.
I will definitely […]