I like the way you write. Its excellent for short stories. Describe more, draw your audience in a little more

@ shai … you are not being a party-popper, just stating your opinion. A one bedroom flat has a living room, a bedroom, kitchen, bathroom and toilet. Thats why he was able to carry her from living room to […]

I did. Thanks so much!

Not that I know of but I was heavily influenced by “The Time Traveler’s Wife”

Wow. Thanks. I love your writing Bubbllinna. Thanks for your compliment

Thank Kaycee.You know a compliment from you is huge

Thank you Nicole. Please I am open to all constructive criticism. Thanks once again for the compliments and points

Nicely done! Love how you wove a story around glasses

Interesting plot. I really liked the plot. Work on your descriptions. Make it relatable, make me feel I was there when it was happening. The thesaurus is your friend

Great job. Very descriptive. You don’t come across as “light reading” but very intense. It will appeal to some people but not others but I really liked reading your work

ok, so I’m hearing in summary a short story is more like a snapshot and a story that spans several years works more as a novella. Thanks so much. I am filling out the story with more details about their first […]

@ teewah, thank you for reading. I see what you are saying about the reunion. Also I meant, Mila as she was called (the shortened form of her name instead of Milagros)

@ Chemo, I see what you are saying about […]

Thanks. My writing punctuations are usually what makes me abandon my stories half-written Hopefully, this avenue will help me stretch myself

@ kaycee, it was the color of the dress her mother made her wear and it was one of her favorites. Red is also associated with wantoness and guilt.

Can you expand on that a little bit more? Thanks

Okay. I will separate them for a better read. Thanks for the comments

I see where you are coming from. Duly noted. Thanks for the constructive criticism

Many thanks to you