Nice… You write well.

Check: The lights were back to *been* being bright…
Well done. $ß.

Beautiful.
Well done. $ß.

This is what it is: African sci-fi. Africans too can write.
Kudos for an excerpt well written. Wonder what the whole story reads like… Bien hecho. $ß.

I like it…maybe cos the story strikes a personal chord. It’s a neat work too.
Well done LMP. Keep writing. $ß.

It’s not fair what one has to read here nowadays.

Shit happens, Andy and sadly some parents bury their children deep in it.

To your story: it is littered with mispellings and improper tense usage, so kindly […]

Just starting out as a writer. Oh well, may your ink never stop flowing.
Well done. $ß.

I had to go to part 1 to see if the story was redeemable.
The story reads like a nigerian movie and so does the capitalized title in the final paragraph. Part 1 was slightly better though.
The work could […]

It’s a good read. Enjoyable actually. It has that childlike thing bout it that usually makes a story read better. But then it gets to a point, and I tell myself – this girl is way too smart and intuitive for a […]

*exhales*

Chemo, you deliberately wove this story so we could fall in love with the ordinariness* of this family and then you hit us with the shock of the flood. The feeling of suprise – though somewhat […]

Hehehe@magic. They already know that’s the way forward these days.

.@sanjules. Surely, you can manage to change your standard comment. Lol. For a moment I thought I was reading the wrong chapter after reading the exact reply you gave in part 1.. Default message I guess. […]

Hooked… The closing line is enough to keep one hooked into the next. Well done, Jules. $ß.

Hmmm. This is something I want to read. Going through the backlog of series can be a… But this I think, would be worth it.
Love the dialogues and description. Gotta see what you’ve been serving before…
Well done. $ß.

Simple lines and message. Sweet. Well done Topaz. $ß.

Well, let’s have the next. I love the title. the dude is a jerk, couldnt he wait for a few hours?
Well done. $ß.

Although, this drowning out of your story stated by Tola is evident, something tells me it was your intention to make it seem so.
I did enjoy the way it seemed to flounder in the sea of lyrical descriptions. […]

It’s the thought that matters they say, so I’ll commend the effort it took to write this.

While reading it, I expected to see something different but it just rings with the same tune that those self-help books […]

Welcome to NS, Edward. I can tell by your story and bio that you are new to this thing called writing and posting for people to read.

This story didn’t need to be this length. It’s got lots of errors that can […]

Like Tola, I could guess the story but it’s cool that you could show us how that affected her and the fear it puts in her for her kids.

Keep writing, Well done, Omoney. $ß.

Very interesting piece, Mazi. Well done. $ß.

Writing a story with lots of main characters is not easy. You did a good job which I know will be made better when you take all the constructive criticisms into consideration.
An interesting read twas for me, […]

Ostar o! U won’t kill me with these your ‘philosophical tini tini’ o. Daluu… $ß.

Tah! @chemokopi. U and who? Will get you drunk on kaikai, alomo and monkite and watch you dance azonto on a high.

Lol. Sorry for your fingers, Fran6. The literary devices in this ur reply plenty pass the one wey dey for some poems I don read.
Glad to be of warm service… $ß. Hehe.

Hehehe.. @sambrightomo. Ask kaycee where it went to..
@kaycee… U know how it is na… You are The One sha o. Hehehe. How far na?
@seun-odukoya. Nurrin o. Just pondering on your acute sense of smell ni.

@eldee. Esta es una hermosa poema! Simple yet amazing.
There are not enough words to describe how these poems really come across to me…
You’ve found your scale, El and you write the minor so well. Keep at […]

@eldee. Esta es una hermosa poema! Simple yet amazing.
There are not enough words to describe how these poems really come across to me…
You’ve found your scale, El. You do write the minor so well. Keep at […]

Had to go and read the first. Interesting goings-on in this story. Did I say I like your title? Yeah, I like it. Well done. $ß.

I like this story. Nice details… Read part two before this. I like this more. Well done, Harold. Keep writing. $ß.

It held me spellbound, Francis and you aren’t even done yet. Wow! Next installation, please.
Bien escritos. Bien hecho. $ß.