I enjoyed the part of the cruise.. Seems like you knew your setting very well. The way you slipped in the names of the musicians and their songs was neat.
When I read bout the serial murder, I felt sad not […]
Things like this should happen once in a while, so you have something to write about. Lol.
Glad you closed the door, if not someone or something would have come knocking on your wee small door.
Well done. $ß.
Someday, when you come back to this piece, you will be able to tell straight away what works and what doesn’t. It paints a clear picture though, of someone prepping for a journey of life.
Keep writing. $ß.
I had to go to part 1 to see if the story was redeemable.
The story reads like a nigerian movie and so does the capitalized title in the final paragraph. Part 1 was slightly better though.
The work could […]
It’s a good read. Enjoyable actually. It has that childlike thing bout it that usually makes a story read better. But then it gets to a point, and I tell myself – this girl is way too smart and intuitive for a […]
.@sanjules. Surely, you can manage to change your standard comment. Lol. For a moment I thought I was reading the wrong chapter after reading the exact reply you gave in part 1.. Default message I guess. […]
Hmmm. This is something I want to read. Going through the backlog of series can be a… But this I think, would be worth it.
Love the dialogues and description. Gotta see what you’ve been serving before…
Well done. $ß.