Great work, again.

Ok. I am not a fan of serial works unless I follow from the beginning.
@Ayoks, I like the piece. Just a lil error:
…I just muttered words which seemed to have *desert* me… Shoulda been deserted.

The […]

Nice story-poem… Keep writing and ‘experimenting with words for artsake’, Z. Well done. $ß.

Movie is ‘Three idiots’ most likely.

Poems come in different styles these days… This became rhythmical after a while but you ought to aim for a more uniform structure so it could be really seen as a ‘Poem’. […]

I enjoyed the part of the cruise.. Seems like you knew your setting very well. The way you slipped in the names of the musicians and their songs was neat.
When I read bout the serial murder, I felt sad not […]

@yinkus101 thanks for stopping by. Do read the next episode and watch out for the unfolding story…

For the records: Nigerian English is that English that has been domesticated and nativised to express the Nigerian worldview, experience and culture. Pidgin is just a variety which can grow to become creole. […]

THANK YOU SIR, I DONT KNOW MY WRITING INSTRUMENTS @fadehan!

thank u @olajumoke God bless you.

You can do your research and correct me if I am wrong.We are all here to learn and I like your reference to Achebeism.I will like to to more bro.God bless you.

thank you @Fadehan, but this is not Nigerian English na,it is pidgin. Going by your definition of Achebeism, I don’t think this work fall within that range.Chinua Achebe’s Things Fall Apart qualifies to be […]

Tales of nigeria’s doom plenty o… Spacing the paragraphs for each speaker would have helped too. Revisit this, smoothen out the rough edges and all would be well with it.

I enjoyed some parts esp. the naming […]

bubbling bubble thanks for reading jare.Nor mind me with d English jwor.But thanks for even stopping to comment,I appreciate @sibbylwhyte shalom

The lender huh? Somehow he still lent life to Obi. The words in this piece. I comot cap o…
Well done.$ß.

Hmmm. Guy U be pastor? Your poems seem to all be based on God’s words. Good thing.
I like this one better than the last.
Keep writing and getting better.
Well done. $ß.

Motivational.

Well done. $ß.

Wow! Sigmund Freud’s psycholo-analytic theory will suffice here. D child is first a special one and undoubtedly faces psychological trauma.Now if love is not shown to her it only increases the pace at which she […]

@excellency and @sibbylwhyte. I do enjoy a good number of these, but mine are done privately and even physical. No mumuness involved. Check my inbox.

Me thinks some people should concentrate on improving their writing and leave mumuness well alone.

Something is definitely not right with the Kess girl jare.
You’ve got syntax issues. But it didn’t stop me from enjoying the tori.
Well done. $ß.

Interesting story. Will be waiting for the next to drop.

Somehow I feel that troubled girl is the woman of his dreams and he doesn’t know yet.
I’d like to spend some days in Natpris as an observer.
Well […]

Things like this should happen once in a while, so you have something to write about. Lol.
Glad you closed the door, if not someone or something would have come knocking on your wee small door.
Well done. $ß.

Nice poem. Killimunati.
Since you are rhyming:

An era of the new sun* would still work.
Oh war, let *earthly/earth’s* peace cease(the presence of be calls for past tense of cease-ceased.)
An era of *human* […]

Rape. Almost a norm these days, sadly. If you get them, cut off their fucking balls.
Keep writing. $ß.

Good message. Not so good a delivery system… Rewrite it later like Mimi says and you might be suprised how it turns up better. Keep writing…$ß.

Na who go blame am? Everybodi don turn oliver twist na.
I bin dey wonder about de english wey boku for dis tori, but you go sort am na. Welledone…$ß.

Someday, when you come back to this piece, you will be able to tell straight away what works and what doesn’t. It paints a clear picture though, of someone prepping for a journey of life.
Keep writing. $ß.

Thank you for reading

@francis easy ooo.Make ur belle nor fall troway for ground oo.

No mind am,he see food eat,e dey find meat.