I look to see the next one then.
nice buildup though, only that you cut the whole trip short, like you use the KISS law there.

I like your style and composition.
you helped my boring afternoon.

thanks thanks thanks.
Tola, you really took time to do this correction.
like a teacher that needs his students progress.
though am not your responsibility but you spent your time doing this corrections.
I […]

Nice piece you put together. Well said.

Sure i just figured that mistake now, ”is” omitted was and i wrote while in place of why ”that while” thank i gat that covered.

Line four- Ate flesh of raw beast, do you suppose it to be what?

Thanks for […]

Tanks, and i took your correction.
I fink maybe the Coherence lies in the last line or every stanza.

May be if you check you would see it. Anyways tanks for your time

Tanks bro, for both your time, Prayer and advise.

But i would have loved to know your take on the poem. How bad is it

Thanks Bro, but i would prefer if you point correction, just little if you have less time to go fully into it.

Thanks for your comment. I would really appreciate direct correction.

like For For real bro this is great. For real the message is driven home straight.

Good one I say. really good.

Good one, drawing a picture, conveying the perfect image, drawn with pure words.

I like your chose of words used.

Woooooow this is a very cute work of act.
Like you took me along in every passing seconds I spent reading this poem.
Nice words about mother nature.
Nice one,nice one.

Short of word, course i might be more worst than you.
No critics at all.

Caro dey fire pass ferarri, can u keep up. Caro dey do she no dey tire, go drink ogidiga.
Or else u no go c her breaklight.

Very cool piece. It had me indulged at every passing second.