Yeniee this is beautiful. The way you wove the story together is awesome.

Thumbs up. An engaging piece

@yeniee just said what went through my mind as I watched that video. Why couldn’t he say he didn’t know. That was my problem. This would not have gone viral if he admitted his ignorance.
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Beautiful and poignant

Hilarious. Which kain bad luck dis two come get now?

Chuckles. I just got it too. Great trick with the name

I liked the end. Still wondering what the issue was.

I loved the winning stories. Congrats

I thoroughly enjoyed this. Hilarious. Well done @petunia007.

True talk @topazo. I was wondering whether I should bother commenting but you took the words right out of my mouth or should I say fingers.

This is why I hate reading series. where is the next one. i enjoyed reading this afronuts

well written. reminds me of somerset

I loved the build up but not the end. I think you were greatly limited by the word count. I would have loved to see what you could have done with this story without a limit of 2500

ditto topazo on the confusing dialogue. The paragraphing made it confusing.

Sorry but this read like a secondary school composition worsened by the fact that I predicted the story by the end of the second paragraph.

I loved this. The style too. I didn’t quite like the switch of pov at the end. All in all a good story.

Oh please. Too preachy. Rushed. That quote is bullshit. try living with a woman who is a nag but who cooks divinely and you will know where true beauty lies

Oh please. Too preachy. Rushed. That quote is bullshit. try living with a woman who is a nag but who cooks divinely and you will know where true beauty lies

I thot you dwelt too much on the women’s conversation. The good thing was it reminded me it was time to go buy cocoa butter. Ah, woman palaver

this is well written. well done

God deliver us from pedophiles. I worry for my kids. as a child if any uncle’s hug seemed too long I stopped hugging the person.
U do well

Eya, I feel her pain. engaging

alright, I have read it again and I see Jay is not necessarily James. Hmm, a good trick. perhaps its James’ twin brother John. Now you have my attention.

I am a surprised she did not recognise her husband’s no when she saw it. That’s odd. I mean having to type it before she recognised it.

Too much explanation in this piece. it made the piece clunky. even when writing for a non nigerian audience you should weave the explanation into your piece without its being obvious

this character is crazy. I love this series

I suspected the baby wasn’t Deji’s but the Lola twist was totally unexpected.
Well done

this character is crazy or just hyperactive

very funny. it reminded me of a story i was told about new recruits to a bank being asked to dress crazy as part of a training. getting on a bus proved difficult for quite a no of them

beautiful piece. well done