Nice plot but …
1. Inconsistent tense. Why were u drifting with your tenses?
2. The mission of killing his friend and his wife? The friend bit doesn’t fit. U could have just told us he left to complete his […]
Actually, I partially agree with @afroxyz. Don’t blame Etisalat for turning writers to politicians, blame the writers for dragging themselves and their intergrity through the mud. Etisalat didn’t force anybody to […]
I think I agree with @Hymar on the believability issue. While ‘Animal Farm’ is as absurd as this in the sense that animals were doing impossible things, it is more realistic. Orwell enunciated the physical […]
Definitely hurried. The characters and plot seem too cliched. I think while writing a plot that has been written a thousand and one times, the writer has to make the other elements of fiction stand out so he […]
@Chime221, I am not entirely sure d rhetorical question “whaat is your nakedness to me” doesn’t contradict d last line about never forgetting it. Anyway, that’s just a thought. I also think breaking the poem into […]
I was not a blind man yesterday or the days before yesterday. When I woke up yesterday, in the dimly lit room I used to share with Fatima my estranged wife, I first laid eyes on my wedding picture dangling […]