Hmmn. Facebook love tins. Lol. As for where you went wrong, you went wrong with your tenses. When writing, its often advisable to stick to one tense. Either past or present tense.

It is also best to avoid […]

Well written, does it have a sequel?

Clears throat, lol. Nice write up

Nice, real nice

Wow, this is awesome, a teeny typo though

‘he pressed a small button on the bedside table and a compartment “slide” out.’ I believe it should be “slid”.

This is really good stuff! Some imagination you’ve got

I am Pluto

On whom the rays of your love never smiles

But I am part of you

The way childhood is part of old age

You cannot separate a coin from the image on it

Beautiful, really beautiful

ha…..whoa whoa, I enjoyed this. some thriller it is. Nice one

Hahaha, lol. They must be following her from her village, lol.

I think there were some tense issues. I’m not an expert at poetry tho. But I liked the rhyme, I often find it hard to make my poems rhyme, so I appreciate those who do. Keep writing.

You dey write abeg, I throway salute.

@raptureisforme Women never lost her equality to man, God said, “your desire shall be to your HUSBAND (not all men) and he shall rule over you,” now Christ taught us servant leadership and that’s why Paul said to […]

wow, men, we writers are a weird lot. I remember writing something for a friend I quarreled with in secondary school. she took one look at it and went “its too long” Lol. This is really beautiful.

hehehe… he just put his problems on hold, they were waiting patiently for him. Lol

Hahaha…. Please no too tey in posting the next episode.

You must be Frank Peretti fan, am I right?… Hehe

whoop whoop, lets go there! lol

I like this story, and the way you revealed the dog’s identity, Nice!
However as pointed out above, there were tense issues and typos, but we’re all here to learn eh. Keep writing.

You can count on me *Salutes* #ClassifiedInfoTins. Lol

I also know the full name. Saw it on a website months ago, had something to do with poetry, and the lassie claimed she was just trying her hands on poetry when she wrote” a patient of Alzheimers”

@Estee

John carter (recommended for you, had to do with travelling to another planet), the rise of the planet of apes, no ordinary family(series), kyle xy (series), splice (had some really icky parts. lol)… E.t.c […]

@Estee, i think that makes it easier for you, you could write something in relation to geography, I believe it still falls within the region of science. I for instance can’t write anything sci fi that focuses on […]

@nicolebassey Lol! Nice apology poem @sambrightomo

Even though i knew the ending, it still had a thrilling finish. Nice rendition of David and Bathsheba’s story. You did nice with it.

wow…. lovely

I would like to see where this leads. Some imagination you’ve got

sweet… science fiction, this rocks, but the word limit though. Nice one

@kodeya Thank you

Congratulations!!!! Men, this was long overdue. My head took on a larger shape while reading the part about learning about emotional depth from a small girl like me. You really deserve this. Congrats once again to […]

Okay…. I think when writing, its wise to vary the length of your sentences. Most of your sentences were very short and this disrupted the flow of the story. You used full stops where you could have used commas, […]