Sweetie, I get what you’re trying to do here. Writing informally et al but please get serious. Pay attention to structure, punctuation and syntax.
You switched tenses a lot, would be cool to maintain one tense; […]

I think the word you’re looking for instead of “abhors” is “harbours”. Good read as usual Jummy. Funny that the baby should choose this time to show up. Hehehe.

Simply beautiful…the writing and the story. Well done.

Thank you Sam. We all learn everyday.

Thank you Daramola

Thank you Kosnie.

Jummy you’re pretty darling at 2nd POV yourself. Thank you for your kind comment. I appreciate. Good to see you on here. By the way I’m silently following NHOCS. Great job.

Hehehehe @H-RATED your comment cracked me up sire. No one is agbaying anyone na. May the best man win. Thank you for your kind comment.

@schatzilein longest time! Missed you and your mouthy comments ooh! Glad to see you on here again. I hope to be around some more darl.

Some crazy Baby Mama drama. Heehehee. This was well written except for teeny-weeny errors that can be handled by thorough editing.

I enjoyed this.

Well written, powerful descriptions…a flash in all ramifications. Very good job. These superstitions and cultures sha. I guess we’ve got a lot to learn about the minority tribes in our country. Thumbs up @H-RATED

Well written, easy to read. Good Job Dee.

Okay I really like this. Wow. I’ll follow this definitely. Good job dear.

Really nice start. Dull end. There’s nothing here to make me wanna read the part two but of course i’m sure you can do better.
Also check this: ‘creeping old woman”, i think you meant ‘creepy’
And ‘she was a […]

Well, this started off nice but there are quite a lot of things wrong with it. You seem not to have settled for a particular tense because you keep switching between tenses; past, present etc.

And then you also […]

I’m with @afronuts on this you don’t have to show your hand so soon but at least let us get a peek into the mind of the murderer. You told us straight up why he killed his girlfriend when you should’ve been […]

This is going really good Jummy. Where’s the next part?

Does that title still hold,Jummy? I think you’re doing a better job here than I am. I’ve missed this place too. Maybe, just maybe there’s something coming. 😉

Whaaat?? OMG!