Well written, powerful descriptions…a flash in all ramifications. Very good job. These superstitions and cultures sha. I guess we’ve got a lot to learn about the minority tribes in our country. Thumbs up @H-RATED
Really nice start. Dull end. There’s nothing here to make me wanna read the part two but of course i’m sure you can do better.
Also check this: ‘creeping old woman”, i think you meant ‘creepy’
And ‘she was a […]
I’m with @afronuts on this you don’t have to show your hand so soon but at least let us get a peek into the mind of the murderer. You told us straight up why he killed his girlfriend when you should’ve been […]