This is remarkable. I’m kinda speechless, dumbstruck. Simply awestruck!!!!!

A Great write. I enjoyed the flow…

OMG!!! Intimidated ke? forget it @kwiksie :) :) I had no option than to answer the call from a special one. What’s been happening?

@omoniyi-adeshola, am good. It’s been ages, hope you’re swimming in the ocean of liveliness?

“cause it’s been awhile,
I threw away my file
and took a walk,
with your work and talk.

I’m enjoying the rhythm,
like @kwiksie ‘s reality hymn
in a fashion beautifully crafted
and not just hinted.

It’s […]

I’m yearning for more lines ad this riveting piece triggers some nostalgic feelings…

I prefer natural hair to any artificially created hair. While I’m not hands in glove with those hairstyles or hairdos that look too artificial, I’d not been irate with a moderately artificial hair…

Don’t try anything like limiting Yoruba…use more of it…

Like I love life
I love your rhyme
sweeter than grime
and a limey thyme….

Amazing
and kind of intriguing
in a sea of realism
farther from surrealism

Simply a beautifulo piece…

I think you can only be better. Accept the well-intentioned corrections above and work out your betterment like buttermint…

Shit happens! This pure realistic story is one that’s relatable with…..waitng for more of your tales….

Like @namdi, I see the possibility of continuity which could make the story more captivating….

I love the rhymes
making a rhythm
culminating in a symphony
that’s really a harmony….

A good tale but can be better structured in terms of paragraphing….

Woooow! This is intriguing, I love the carefully chosen linguistic items ranging from the Yoruba to pidgin to non-standard English to the Queens. In short, the intelligent melange of different verbotic components […]

I was drawn like a drone by the title…still on board…

Let me not prempt the sequel….waiting…

Oh my little baby….I got engrossed, kind of caught with waves and webs of emotions, almost taking the typos that @namdi corrected as oversight….