Damilola Yakubu

Damilola Yakubu

  • It will always be a hobby. ‘Not everything is “word and opposite”.’ The fact that it is doesn’t stop it from being serious work or a ‘chore ‘.

    For the analysis: I can’t do that for this piece – there’s too much […]

  • Lol. Okay then. Writing is a hobby for me :D.
    Keep ‘experimenting’. I haven’t read your other pieces, I’ll try to do that.

    I am re-reading bits of this piece and I find myself amused, almost laughing. […]

  • Okay, where do I start?
    This is too long, and needlessly long. What is the essence of this story? I wanted to stop half-way and just comment, but I thought I owed you due diligence so I finished it. I enjoyed the […]

  • Another ‘Fattening room’ story and I didn’t tire reading another one because this was told well. Can I take the beautiful Uduak home with me? :D. In three sentences you made her ‘sumptuous’. ‘Sumptuous’ – I hope […]

  • Damilola Yakubu commented on the post, The Execution 5 years ago

    I enjoyed this, the suspense most of all. The first sentence was a good opening – it instantly placed me at the scene of the story. It needs some editing. Some of the sentences need ‘trimming’. ‘…the blades of […]

  • I enjoyed the commanding tone the narrative had, especially at the beginning. I really loved the first paragraph. I learnt quite a bit from this piece. This – ‘…because of our minor status, we suffer […]

  • Damilola Yakubu commented on the post, Sangi Layi 5 years ago

    I loved this story. The fact that you put a ‘whole story’ into 300 words is admirable. I enjoyed most the undercurrent philosophy of ‘Sangi Layi’ – these bits of the dialogue resonated: ‘The one who gives another […]

  • I liked this story; I followed the narrative of the traditional wedding. Thank you for bringing that part of TIV culture to the fore.
    “It’s ironical sometimes that a step backwards is what moves the society […]

  • Thank you for bringing a minority ethnic group to the fore. I haven’t heard of the. Alago people before, neither have I heard of the Amiri festival nor what an oke is. A lot has been said on how this story can be […]

  • It’s amusing to see what an ‘outsider’ sees from the inside. I enjoyed your description of the dance; I found myself imagining it, trying to see if I could get the dance. I learnt a new culture here, thank you. […]

  • I think @anakadrian explained well. And yes this an unconventional story. Maybe next time you could increase the spaces in between the paragraphs to indicate change in time. Kudos again.

  • Thanks a lot. You could pay to read this? Wow. :D. Thanks. I will.

  • @agbonkhese Thanks. The ‘no story’ ba… :D. Yeah, living with her consequences is unavoidable regardless of what the future holds for her. Perhaps next time I’d infuse some morals for those who need a glaring […]

  • Good story. Well done. Loved some of the descriptions. The fact that you packed three scenes into this flash without making a mess of it is commendable. Kudos.

  • I like the telling of the story. ‘You have bitten more than you can chew’ drove the story home. Good work. Kudos.

  • I loved the imagery of this story. The ending didn’t seem forced which I think showed the quality of the storytelling. I questioned the part where he asked her to keep it a secret. If it was a tradition, why tell […]

  • Hot. Hot. Hot. I enjoyed the paragraphing, the sequencing of your narrative; it flowed like the sexy dance between the two cousins. The crescendo of the dance saw her leave for school. Thrilling work. Gosh. Well done.

  • Powerful imagery. The language appealed to me a lot. I loved your use of words. Thank you for your craftsmanship. I, however, didn’t like this piece because there was no ‘story’ per se to connect to. Good work. Well done.

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