Hmmm…a subject matter of depth written with transparent simplicity…

NIce.

Thank God for that. Its all good. We’re good.

Haa!

I smell a romantic rat somewhere!

@sambrightomo your head must be swelling and your heart palpitating like jumping catfish at ketu market.

You guys will cause jealousy on NS oh…

Lovely piece […]

@Estee Thanks for clearing it up for him. My apology was metaphorically stated actually. I was going to make sure I don’t comment on any work by him again. But since he has cleared the error, I might renege on the decision.

Okay let’s look at a few then…

“he saw Rita, a girl the same age who loved at number 5 hanging out by the gates to her home.” – This line confused me until I realized ‘Loved’ was supposed to be ‘Lived’. Just […]

Wow…beautiful imagination you have here!

The narration was fluid and vivid in imagery, descriptive power was scrumptious.
I was engaged all the way.
The psychiatrist becoming the patient was a shocking […]

Others have spoken what was in my mind.

The only palpable explanation I can say for the way your story is, is that you just did ‘art for art’s sake.’ – which means the story was not written to entertain but […]

lol…sounds like the kind of stuff that would run through @jaywriter‘s mind.

What’s Myne talking about? That you write too much about sex? Is she speaking the truth?

Funny story of the misdemeanors of childhood. Like Bubblinna said, this story seems to need more flesh.
Also I notice errors in your expressions and you seem to miss out a number of words. Try proof-reading well […]

Uumm….okay. The height of my expectation was a bit floored here…maybe it’s because the whole scenario took a slow pace. Since its a series I can never come to a conclusion on the whole story. However I feel […]

lol…okay.

Very realistic and a typical scenario of a typical uncommitting guy’s reaction to news about pregnancy. I found the following lines funny:

“We could marry. I’ll be eighteen next month.” – […]

Aah…now I get it! I knew you wouldn’t have written this just like that. What a smart way to soothe her back.
Well, I just commented on some dude’s story ‘Casting Shadows’ and he got pissed and lambasted me. But […]

Really? I offended you? Wow sorry then if I gotyou offended.

I don’t know what to make of this story. It doesn’t seem to be going anywhere. The good thing is that you are making an effort. I believe if you keep at it, you’ll perfect your skill. Also try work on building […]

lol…so you just had to re-create a scenario from the Bible…smart idea. Reminds me of something I’m presently working on too.

I see this as a smart way of escaping idea blockage when you’re wondering what […]

Wow…

@topazo me I no know what you mean by ‘not good’ but this is one powerfully expository short story.

@Injoman has painted the tragic picture of the dreaded sharia practice that is robbing womanhood of […]

Haaa! Now its getting hot with that last line!

You’ve still managed to keep the Prisca girl a total mystery…creating a hunger to know who the heck she is…thus meaning I am waiting to read your next […]

That this is an excerpt made me understand the part with the first girl otherwise I would have said it wasn’t really necessary in being that prolonged. And also I almost got lost in the computer and code jargons […]

Is this a stage play or a film script? Because I notice the way its written is a bit odd to me.
I’m wondering if indicating the sweet sensation food pack was necessary and also I think you need to check on your […]

The beauty of brevity.

Why do short poems have this depth in them? COuld it be because simpler and shorter says more?
As short as this was, it was deep and I liked it.

A love story in two verses.

Seun danced. He danced ‘Azonto’, switched to ‘Etighi’, maneuvered into ‘Alanta’ and bounced into ‘Yahoozee’ – all dance styles combined to impress Bella, one of the ladies on the bridal train.

He had heard […]

Either you’re in love or you just decided to make @nicolebassey your muse.

You must definitely be a fan of hers with this ode that raps so much accolades about her. Was it her Ernestra Chronicles that rendered […]

Is this an excerpt or just a stand-alone short story?

I felt a kind of disconnect at the beginning but later understood when I went to read it the second time. The story is simple and sad, you narrated it well […]

Uumm…okay.

You take your time to describe your characters and etch a clear picture of scenarios which is good. But you should be careful in your expressions and semantics. Take for example, this line:

“two lifeless bodies […]

You and your depressing tales!

Haba…you are a bloody good writer…your tragic themes are so strong.
I feel bad having to read it on a day I was feeling jovial and bustling with hilarity.

But hey…as a […]

Also lest I forget, I’m not sure I see this as ‘funny’ in terms of categorization. Probably just ‘fiction’

Hmm….reads like a true story – probably due to the realism of what stiudents go through in exam halls with tensed atmospheres.
The story also brings to mind the possibility of a downfall become the catalyst […]