Totally in agreement with you @shaifamily.
Again, the poet here began in the past tense and moved to the present.
I liked the last two lines though

After reading I could connect. While reading though, I literally suffered through a headache brought on by such a long writing without any paragraphs and very long sentences at a time and very many imagery poured […]

And you are truly evil, Detective Tel!
Nice… even kids would love

This is a nice poem despite the repetitive *even… and the fact that I never knew peace to reside on the other side of a conflict. I thought the side we choose to stay on was the better side…the peaceful one? I […]

Very nice essay here.
I agree that Nigeria has a lot of bias when it comes to our history esp Nig-Biafra but, I really disagree that keeping quiet about it is the way to go. Its like saying, let’s keep quiet and […]

This was cool in some places…kept feeling something was missing…maybe the grouping didn’t capture or specify enough…
Ur second group…seemed focused on all but the very people who might have been examples […]

touching…

Deep one
decision of the poet-speaker is that of a victim o

But the same blood flow(s)

I liked your first two tales. Would have loved them to be completely separate so I know what am reading or looking for. A tad confusing since they aren’t a whole…

Hahahahahahahaha
He slipped after changing his mind? Ah, shit!

Well, not a story I’d buy in a hurry but, the opening: …he’d miss the world, and the closing…really nice.
Keep writing!

@kaycee not fair…

Was a good poem until it went from poetic to…I don’t really know- beginning from “…young friends…”.
Why are they all in capital letters anyway?

Okay.

This is a really good read.
Suspenseful and enjoyable. That kingmaker is…cool.

Abrupt ending…beyond pointing out errors, literature corrects…the abrupt ending made me ask, “so?”

“She looked at her husbands face and she knew” Sent chills down my spine…
Great piece… wish it was just another tragic fiction…

Beautiful piece…
U captured the confusion and the questions in our harts…

Really nice tribute…this is more than a poem.

Yeah, the simplicity…liked that.
Not always good to tell people it’s ur first attempt. People tend to see stuffs not there..
loved how it ended with the husbandman…the tenderer…
keep this up.

It’s rare when we see simple sentences produce ‘exotic’ pieces like this…has it all: humour, morals, suspense, appeal (to all as many can relate) and that…simplicity.
Great job.

Deserved what they got?

Just okay
Dressed for an occasion, no correlation… no relationship between dressing up for your wedding? an occasion?