The one thing Mrs. Ugabi hated most in her life was embarrassment and the shame involved with it. And due to her paranoid nature, and low anger threshold, almost anything slightly inappropriate was considered an embarrassment. Mrs. Ugabi was a mother of four children. But she wasn’t your average mother who did the dishes at … Continue reading A Hot Summer
There was a definite gloom in the air as Sunday morning arrived for Mrs. Ugabi. Andrew, on the other hand, was excited. Not that he was happy to be leaving his parents; no, he was more excited to be leaving Nigeria for a country in another continent for the first time. It seemed to take … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone chapter critique-11
“He’s all right,” Andrew replied distractedly. He thought of the kind of trouble his mother was in right now. He wondered if she was in a cell, or at the police counter. How could she do this on the day he was coming back? He groaned to himself. How could she do it at all? … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone chapter critique-10
Andrew rested his head on his hand, and listened for a whole hour to Uncle Jeffery as he gave him tips on how to behave when he got to the Ukraine. It went on and on, covering the subjects in-depth until Andrew thought there were no angles left uncovered. When it seemed there could be … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone chapter critique-9
The gatekeeper approached their car. He wore a bright blue shirt and a pair of plain black trousers, and the name Jonas was sewn roughly onto his shirt pocket. “Yes, can I help you?” he asked them rudely, peeking into the car so he could see the two of them closely. “We are here for … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone chapter critique-8
* It was at about eleven thirty PM when Uncle Jeffery woke up, feeling worried. He took out his phone, and went to his received call list, and then cursed as he realized it wasn’t a dream. Mrs. Ugabi had called him earlier to ask if he knew anything about Andrew’s whereabouts. How could Osirik … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone chapter critique-7
Nothing prepared Eshury, who was smiling triumphantly at first, for what he was about to see as he got to the scene of the accident. His smile faded instantly, and his heart began to beat so hard he felt it would burst out of his weak chest. As he neared the bus, he lost control … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone Critique request – 6
Eshury was in shock from Osirik’s unusual reaction. Why wasn’t he mad or something? “Well?” Osirik said. “No.” Eshury replied, dumbstruck. “Sprinkle a little water here and there. That’s all. You should pay more attention; we expect wonders from you.” Osirik got up and left, leaving his Revlis and a disturbed Eshury behind. I must … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone Critique request – 6
Chapter Three The Thief It had been raining heavily when Eshury appeared in the forest, his gray robe dirty, and his sandals worn. Eshury was your average looking boy with dark eyes. There was nothing remarkable about him, not even his afro, which was as big as a small hill, and which was now flat … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone Critique request – 5
Sounds of the big gate being opened outside were heard, and Mrs. Ugabi impulsively went to the window to see who it was. There was a chance it was Mr. Debo, the deranged and troublesome neighbor with the clean-shaven, egg-shaped head who found it amusing to park his car near their house entrance, making it … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone Critique request – Chapter 4
Chapter Two The Nephew, His Family and Uncle Jeffery Andrew had grown a lot taller since they last saw him, Mrs. Ugabi noticed as he got out of the car. His shoulders were a lot broader and some strands of hair had already begun growing from his chin. “Looking more and more like your father … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone, Chapter by Chapter critique request….3
The night was perfect when Mr. Hindan and Mrs. Tonslip came out of their houses, with torch-lights (just in case), and their whistles hanging from chains tied to their necks, to patrol the street. It was a Wednesday night, the night when the much-anticipated final Championship match would be held. Earlier that day, Mr. Johnson … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone, Chapter by Chapter critique request….2
PROLOGUE I swear by Apollo, the healer, Asclepius, Hygieia, and Panacea, and I take to witness all the gods, all the goddesses, to keep according to my ability and my judgment, the following Oath and agreement: To consider dear to me, as my parents, him who taught me this art; to live in common … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone. Chapter One
Hello guys, It’s me with my wahala again oh. Okay the first book I published on Amazon Kindle is called THE SEPTAVALENT STONE, right. Okay, I really enjoyed writing the book, and without sending it to an editor, I got it published. Now most of my Nigerian readers seem to have no problem with … Continue reading The Septavalent Stone, Chapter by Chapter critique request….
Hey guys, so after incorporating most of your comments and taking others into consideration, I went ahead and sent it to an editor to clean it and trim it of the excess fat. I only received a week ago and have been working on it. I suddenly thought of writing a query and after much tinkering … Continue reading Query Letter for THE OTHER CHILD.