Nostalgia

It was my sophomore year at the university when my friend, Ale gave the reply, “I’m fine” to a common question. He died that night. I heard he’d shouted answers to callers from his sleep. Ale wasn’t fortunate, I was.
Let me show you this page of my childhood. It was late 1996.
Only my father and I at home. Mom had gone on a picnic. Dad looked at me smiling, with a packet of biscuit in his hands. He announced he was going out and won’t stay long. He took me to while the time away at Ninu’s.
Ninu was the elderly woman with a wrinkled smile whose house stood opposite ours like a dwarf, filled with boxes of one roomed apartments. In front of her house she had set up a small stall where she sold petty goods suited to school children. After father left, Ninu took me by the hand. She led me to the backyard. Then left, with no notice, leaving only me to tolerate the sizzling sun. There I stood an abandoned boy.
No sooner hot waters began to fall from my eyelids sipping in my mouth, forming a soft mix with the cabin biscuit in it than two sights met my eyes.
One under the sun. Another in a dimly lit room of glasses. Ninu was there looking at me in the mirror. She stood poised, her warning finger pointed at me. Oddly, I saw another man stop her from nowhere. Then even he was gone. Ninu was trembling, the wrinkled smiles gone from her face.
Tears on my face were drying up. Ninu had come back. She led me to the front yard. Her eyes cold. She didn’t even look me in the face to apologize but I think I was not sad.



7 thoughts on “Nostalgia” by Somefun Oluwasegun (@SamoluExpress)

  1. Good writing but too complex. I don’t understand

  2. Good writing but too abstract… I don’t understand

  3. What was this about? Maybe you stopped too soon? The point you were trying to make didn’t come across.

  4. Too many short sentences and periods . As the others said, it is hard to comprehend what the story actually is. Please make a new edition and post because it seemed interesting.

  5. They’ve said it all, do take their comments to improve

  6. @SamoluExpress…..

    Please, can you make a summary of the tale? I don’t understand what I just read.

  7. Yeah i thought it had something to do with Ale…..I Looooved the beginning…..
    ‘It was my sophomore year at the university when my friend, Ale gave the reply, “I’m fine” to a common question. He died that night. I heard he’d shouted answers to callers from his sleep.’
    That Got me Hooked!

Leave a Reply